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 Oct 13 2004, 09:10 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer*  Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134  |
looking up in the sky for a new day to come
seeing the same faces and the same old thing i see everything and what revolves around me divided into a world between happiness and hate trapping their minds like hiding behind a shadow escaping feelings and wounds, that leaves a scar the anthem of hope going around in our heads an unexplaining melody that calms our minds the song of the new children coming to our life restoring what was once happy and what was hate bringing back our pride to enjoy life once again we sing the melody of our dying hope |
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Oct 14 2004, 10:56 AM
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 We are the cure. Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 4,936 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 1,456 |
*claps*
Awesome. |
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Oct 14 2004, 12:11 PM
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 Indie Fairy Group: Member Posts: 99 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,135 |
wow. your really talented! that was good
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Oct 14 2004, 08:50 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
thnx for the feedback heres the same thing but proof read
looking at up in the sky by a new day to come, seeing the same faces and the same old thing, I see all and what revolves around me, divided into a world between the happiness and the hatred trapping his minds hiding behind a shadow, that escapes the feelings and injured, that leaves a scar, the hymn of walking around hope in our heads, an unexplaining melody that calms our minds the song of the new children that come to our life, that restores what was once happy and what was to return from hatred, restoring our pride to enjoy the life once more, we sing the melody of our dying hope |
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Oct 14 2004, 09:43 PM
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 Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
That's much better...You should edit your original post.
QUOTE trapping his minds hiding behind a shadow, that... That part's a bit awkward...did you type it up wrong? |
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Oct 15 2004, 07:43 PM
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 aiko Nakamura at your service Group: Member Posts: 1,518 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 18,144 |
i dig it haha im YOUR number one fan haha.
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Oct 15 2004, 07:44 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
ooh yeah i typed it wrong it was suppose to be trapping our minds hiding behind a shadow, escaping feelings and wounds that leaves a scar and etc...
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Oct 15 2004, 08:42 PM
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Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Oh, okay, makes more sense.
Good line, BTW. |
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Dec 26 2006, 07:37 PM
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 chinky Group: Official Designer Posts: 2,566 Joined: Jul 2006 Member No: 434,437 |
awesome! bravo ;]
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