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 Oct 10 2004, 11:58 PM
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Eternal Syn  Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000  |
It's you, your smile
That makes it all worthwhile I wish I could hug you all day In this embrace, forever we shall stay You should know your beauty is unmatched We are always toghether, always attached Our unconditional love will never outdate The two of us must have met by fate You're my one and only love I know you came from above I'll confess my love to you till the day I die This is no lie Ok, this one didn't take me as long as my last one. I did this one quite fast actually =] |
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Oct 11 2004, 02:43 PM
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SOS Brigade!! Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 |
QUOTE(Cloud_X @ Oct 10 2004, 8:58 PM) It's you, your smile That makes it all worhtwhile spelled worthwhile wrong.. and hmm i like this poem gj =P |
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Oct 11 2004, 09:00 PM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
oh whoops heh heh and thx for the reply
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Oct 11 2004, 09:14 PM
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SOS Brigade!! Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 |
no problemo =P just keep up the good work
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Oct 11 2004, 09:35 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
what about no rhyming huh!! lol good job clous i like it nice flow with it too
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Oct 11 2004, 09:36 PM
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SOS Brigade!! Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 |
stop bein an ass mike =P
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Oct 11 2004, 09:37 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
srry bad day sam i just have that feeling when i come home one of these days ima be in soo much trouble lol im not being an ass im giving compliments sheesh
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Oct 11 2004, 09:38 PM
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SOS Brigade!! Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 |
i was jp =P anyways cloud i want to read another one from you =P
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Oct 11 2004, 09:39 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
...since when did u become mr advisor SAM huh damn i needa be more active in here lol im slacking off going to cB mayn
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Oct 11 2004, 09:40 PM
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SOS Brigade!! Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 |
advisor? never =P
im like slowly quitting cb... |
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Oct 11 2004, 10:06 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
whoah why u gonna quit!! naw sam remember if yur ass quits im quitting too!!
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Oct 11 2004, 10:10 PM
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SOS Brigade!! Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 |
cb aint wat it use to be =P and lets stop talking here sorry cloud ill comment again
on the this is no lie.. try making it a tad longer.. i think the flow would go better |
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Oct 11 2004, 10:12 PM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
lol I'll make another poem soon but right now I gotta do one for school actually. =\ it's hard. Too restricted but my poems will come by now and then when I feel inspired or something
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Oct 11 2004, 10:22 PM
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SOS Brigade!! Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 |
kk can't wait =P
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Oct 11 2004, 10:51 PM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
I would've made it longer...but I kinda got lazy and wanted to end it at my third stanza =P
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Oct 11 2004, 10:54 PM
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SOS Brigade!! Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 |
haha i see then next time =P
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Oct 13 2004, 06:40 PM
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 aiko Nakamura at your service Group: Member Posts: 1,518 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 18,144 |
i like this its so sweet. aww makes me want someone now hahaa
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Oct 13 2004, 07:23 PM
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 wanderlust personified. Group: Official Designer Posts: 7,515 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 797 |
Gosh, thats pretty mushy. I hope that someday I'll meet someone who'll feel that way about me.
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