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| *CrackedRearView* |
 Oct 10 2004, 09:05 AM
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Haywood Bay
If you like the way I treat you then come out to Haywood Bay, But if you like to be abused, then with him I guess you'll stay. They say that nice guys finish last, but that is just cliche, So if you want to try and make a change then come with me today. I'm not sure who put it in your head; this idea of being low, But whoever it was doesn't have a heart, and should realize that you glow. You radiate your beauty; it's such a magnificent show, But you never seem to take my word, you always "have to go". You ask me why I try so hard, and I answer subtle and true, I have no other motives, no permiscuous things to do. It's really all quite simple, I want to take care of you, But I know that will never happen, you'll never let me through. So I leave this offer on the table should you really want to say, "I feel like I am happy, I look forward to the day". Just call on me to pine for you, and fight your troubles away, You know where you can find me...down by Haywood Bay. [Footnote: I live in a place called Haywood Bay...and this is written for a certain person who never seems to give me a chance. Enjoy.] |
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Oct 10 2004, 01:01 PM
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 Will write poetry for sex!  Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Damn, very well done, Justin.
Seems like a poem with a lot of time put into it. Didn't think I'd get something like this after those free verses that one night (the ones that sounded like I'd see them in a bathroom stall) 'Haywood Bay' - sounds like a good emo song title. Damn, the lyrics would suit well too. 
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Oct 10 2004, 01:41 PM
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cb=bullshit. Group: Member Posts: 1,783 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,793 |
Sounds like a wonderful emo song title.
I love it... You should write more often... And post them here... Because I'm tired of this other crap they make me read... I'M TIRED OF IT... [dies]... That girl's stupid for not giving you a chance... should I shoot her? 
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Oct 10 2004, 03:04 PM
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 Can't have the hand without the cock. Group: Member Posts: 2,481 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 50,622 |
wow.
 hehe. it sounds like an advertisement. -- good for an emo song , like they said ^^ |
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Oct 10 2004, 09:37 PM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 88 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 49,806 |
thats really good
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| *CrackedRearView* |
Oct 10 2004, 09:53 PM
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I'll post more often so I can get added to your magnificent list, Joe.
I'll put up some of my abstracts later. Thank you for the pluses, everyone. And the title isnt' copyrighted...sell it to an emo band if you want 
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Oct 11 2004, 12:11 AM
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Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Just make the request and I'll gladly add you.
No one bumps that topic though...I swear, I wish it were a sticky. |
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| *CrackedRearView* |
Oct 12 2004, 09:27 PM
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Thanks for adding me, I'll post some more of my work later.
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| *mSz_dOrk_anGeL* |
Oct 15 2004, 09:53 PM
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<3 Its wonderful.
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Oct 15 2004, 11:45 PM
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 aiko Nakamura at your service Group: Member Posts: 1,518 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 18,144 |
mang you write good poems& short storys. i dig them a bunch. ill bet youll win the contest probs.
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| *Azarel* |
Aug 9 2005, 02:48 PM
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Beautifully written; you take a subject which is easily related to by many and make it personal. Sweet. I like.
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