a poem i wrote in the 8th grade (part 3). |
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 Oct 1 2004, 06:15 AM
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 Will write poetry for sex!  Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600  |
One of my other poems from Writers Club...This one I don't like much, But when I read it aloud to Mel, she said she liked it. I really only like the title, LoL.
--- Part 1 Part 2 Dissipating Reality Burning beating with the shots of cold pain. Soulless thoughts, thoughtless soul, Demonic rage, Spin and burst. F*ck the f*cker, Light the fire, Burn the ashes. My mind my rage, My rage my soul. Drown on air, Live in the shadows of the stars, Die in the light of your moon. Dissipating reality, Jump - and hang on... Knife sharp speed, Jumps on air. Fear of courage, Pleasure of pain, Happiness of grief, The life in death, Dissipating reality, Jump - and fall... The Ashes of Writers Club |
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Oct 1 2004, 08:49 AM
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SOS Brigade!! Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 |
hmmm very interesting =P
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Oct 1 2004, 02:33 PM
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cb=bullshit. Group: Member Posts: 1,783 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,793 |
It is not just "very interesting"... It's great work.... why? Because Joe wrote it... it has a lot of... emotion... mhm and it makes me want to be scared that you're going to kill me [hides]... heh okay, i'm kidding
Joe, sweetheart.... You should love everything that you've done.... even if you're talking about puppies and rhyming. :x |
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Oct 1 2004, 02:33 PM
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Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
QUOTE hmmm very interesting =P LoL, More like very crappy. I read it and it seems very hurried and sloppy. I'm glad I don't write so carelessly now. I can't remember if it was one of those quick writes or not. QUOTE even if you're talking about puppies and rhyming. Hahahahha, Maybe I should post that poem up. LoL. So horrible. THAT'S RIGHT, JOE HAS A POEM ABOUT PUPPIES THAT RHYMES!!! |
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