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dispn0ygonekrazy
post Sep 28 2004, 10:08 PM
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i wrote this for my ex right now i dont give a care about any writing guidelines critisism say whatever u want i rhymed this one iight

no matter how hard i tried to get u back
i gotta give it up and get back on track
the times with you id never forget
every last moment that id never regret
only that time when everything fell
where it went in chaos and sent us through hell
just a phone call away i heard ur voice
i choked up on my words and i didnt have a choice
i was so scared i couldnt say sorry to you
out of so many chances it didnt go through
the songs u played while we were on the phone
i cried so hard and realized that im on my own
now im gonna go away and out of your sight
so it can go back to the way when everything was right
im sorry i couldnt say these simple words to you
but only to hope that youd keep your head up and make it through

im like going goodbye here yall im like so f*cked up right now
 
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post Sep 28 2004, 10:10 PM
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nice poem... wat happened...
 
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post Sep 28 2004, 10:13 PM
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i just gave up on everything man...im thinking of quittin CB too .....
 
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post Sep 28 2004, 10:14 PM
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u quit i will hunt you!!
 
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post Sep 28 2004, 10:15 PM
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right now man i dont noe what to do..ive thought of suicide and some other bad sh*t yeh quittin CB would be a good idea wont it?
 
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post Sep 28 2004, 10:48 PM
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if you quit imma quit
 
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post Sep 29 2004, 08:39 AM
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well man u dont needa quit if i quit i already came up with a goodbye message but havent posted it yet im stilll thinking
 
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post Sep 29 2004, 08:40 AM
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u bastard... =P
 
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post Sep 29 2004, 09:00 AM
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bastard lol well sam dooooode well shiet man u like i call it my first friend here and shiet man thnx i think im gonna say goodbye
 
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post Sep 29 2004, 09:03 AM
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your seriously leaving...
man alright then.. cya around
 
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post Sep 29 2004, 09:09 AM
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post Sep 29 2004, 09:11 AM
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aiitez you better stay we need more writers in CB...
 
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post Sep 29 2004, 09:14 AM
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theres plenty of good writers here yall dont need me =/
 
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post Sep 29 2004, 12:07 PM
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You're so emo...

why are you going to kill yourself over a girl... let me ask you some questions:
How old are you?
Is she the same age as you?
How long were you together?
Was it some stupid teenage puppy love?

Your poem wasn't bad and it actually made sense... I actually think if you weren't busy thinking about rhyming then maybe you could have expressed yourself even BETTER! you should try it some time... just let the words come out don't think about what you said previously.... As for the rhyming thing.... if you're going to rhyme then go into rapping or hip hop.

And for the 'oh i'm leaving cB thing...' I have something to say to that:
why?
why leave just because some stupid girl left you and because you're depressed?
i don't think you have a clue of how it is to be depressed...
you're probably not going to commit suicide because you would've done it by now.
if you DO leave... DO NOT.... DO NOT.... DO NOT! make one of those stupid 'goodbye cb' sh*ts in the lounge... GOD ANYTHING BUT THAT.... but if you feel as if you need to say something then... write a poem and ehh underneath be like "okay i'm leaving cb now kthxbye"
 
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post Sep 29 2004, 06:29 PM
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ahhh u made mel mad... just stay mike girls are sometime u shoulnd't over exaggerate about =P
 
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post Sep 29 2004, 07:10 PM
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eh, cheer up fellow poetry writer. Girls arent everything, besides theres alot of them out there, waiting for you.
 
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post Sep 29 2004, 07:34 PM
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i guess your right mel im some stupid emo guy with too much feelings and i aint leaving over a girl i aint depressed cuz of that and well yeah i use too many rhymes ight srry im like that and to say i dont have a clue about being depressed well u may be older than me but as a youngster i know how depressed feels im srry if what im saying pisses u off but just because your older that doesnt mean anything ive been through alot of sh*t and right now im going through a tough time so w/e then ill make it plain and simple iight im leaving cB ok thats it
 
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post Sep 29 2004, 07:44 PM
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I wasn't that serious about the no clue depression thing... age has nothing to do with depression...
I was depressed when I was 11 until I was... well until the present day...
 
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post Sep 29 2004, 07:46 PM
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im sorry im just being an ass right now i dont mean it srrrrry mel its just i just needa go away for while im not leaving just gotta go away yenno be by myself for awhile
 
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post Sep 29 2004, 07:48 PM
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okay, have fun...

and i still think you're an ass :x hehe
 
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post Sep 29 2004, 07:50 PM
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hehe i know well yall take care iight ill miss yall XD
 
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QUOTE(dispn0ygonekrazy @ Sep 28 2004, 10:08 PM)
i wrote this for my ex right now i dont give a care about any writing guidelines critisism say whatever u want i rhymed this one iight

no matter how hard i tried to get u back
i gotta give it up and get back on track
the times with you id never forget
every last moment that id never regret
only that time when everything fell
where it went in chaos and sent us through hell
just a phone call away i heard ur voice
i choked up on my words and i didnt have a choice
i was so scared i couldnt say sorry to you
out of so many chances it didnt go through
the songs u played while we were on the phone
i cried so hard and realized that im on my own
now im gonna go away and out of your sight
so it can go back to the way when everything was right
im sorry i couldnt say these simple words to you
but only to hope that youd keep your head up and make it through

im like going goodbye here yall im like so f*cked up right now

Wow!! Some genius yah got here... impressive man. ohmy.gif tc.
 
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post Sep 30 2004, 12:11 AM
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you didn't even say bye to me you are an ass!!!

mel we can hate him together =P lolz come back soon!
 
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post Sep 30 2004, 12:50 AM
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aww so sweet, really nice poem so talented. for a talented guy like u, i hope u get back 2gether
 
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post Sep 30 2004, 02:14 AM
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You're just blinded right now, Mike.

All your emotions are just clouding you judgment. Give yourself time, and think things through when you're more calm and level-headed.
 
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