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 Sep 24 2004, 08:36 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer*  Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134  |
we both stare at the moonlit sky
thinking of you i start to cry i walk alone in this pouring rain feeling so hurt, feeling so much pain i thought of that time when i held u so tight whispering these words evrything will be alright the look on our face made everything okay just one smile u took my heart away day by day im still living in a past a past i once had that never did last everyday im lost with nothing to do but a broke down heart thats always loving you yay hope u like |
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Sep 24 2004, 09:29 PM
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 to be loved by someone you love is.. everything Group: Member Posts: 1,207 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,205 |
awWww.. cute poem =]..but depressin..hmm
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Sep 24 2004, 09:36 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
lol i dunno about depressin but when i wrote it to me i feel depressed
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Sep 24 2004, 09:37 PM
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to be loved by someone you love is.. everything Group: Member Posts: 1,207 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,205 |
lol it sounds depressin to me.. most of my poems are depressing in in relationship kinda thing.. lol prolly cause when i write..it about my life..
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Sep 24 2004, 09:46 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
lol something in common same here i write poems about my life and relate to it
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Sep 25 2004, 11:48 AM
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SOS Brigade!! Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 |
you know what we should making a writing family =P
beacuse we here all write about love and life =P |
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Sep 25 2004, 01:11 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
a writing family lol good idea SAM!! props to u im thinking of a poem writing community and some other stuff
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Sep 25 2004, 03:53 PM
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Brie Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 10,172 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,548 |
That's a nice poem.
Really nice, actually. Made me somewhat sad, actually to think about it. v.v Oh, well. Very nice job. =] |
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Sep 25 2004, 04:14 PM
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cb=bullshit. Group: Member Posts: 1,783 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,793 |
Some of it doesn't make sense...
you both stare at the moonlit sky thinking of her makes you cry and then the next minute you're alone... well at the beginning you said you were together staring at the moonlit sky, well that's what i inferred from the " we both stare at the moonlit sky" |
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Sep 25 2004, 04:20 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
lol yeh that one was a quickie but i still like it
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Sep 25 2004, 04:22 PM
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SOS Brigade!! Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 |
tahts why its called free write poems =P
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Sep 25 2004, 04:25 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
yh u feel me sam geez lol
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Oct 5 2004, 05:28 PM
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 don't worry, be happy~ Group: Member Posts: 1,538 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 15,899 |
that is such a sweet peom!!! so sad... but romantic.
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Dec 26 2006, 07:14 PM
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 chinky Group: Official Designer Posts: 2,566 Joined: Jul 2006 Member No: 434,437 |
*singsong*
mike is depreeeeesed! |
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Mar 16 2007, 07:02 AM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 280 Joined: Jul 2006 Member No: 436,368 |
i like it you can feel all of the emotions that u were fellings. but i think you could add alittle more.. rather than that.. i love it=]
i also write stuff like that |
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