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 Sep 24 2004, 06:14 PM
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SOS Brigade!!  Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775  |
Another quickie but enjoy!
Smile for me when I'm near because no matter how far I promise i will catch every tear sadness is not for you and me love and happiness is where we should be lean all your pain and sorrow to me for you, Pain and suffering isn't something you should see for because I'll be there when you are down I'll be there when life hurts and you can do nothing but frown I'll be there night and day I'll be there everytime and forever i will stay Beside you because this worlds needs to know its just us two |
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Sep 24 2004, 06:26 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
dammmmmm doooode nice poem lol two thumbs up i would put up more but i only have two lol good job
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Sep 24 2004, 06:54 PM
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 Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Sounds like something worthy of becoming a song.
 Line I like the most in that poem is - "lean all your pain and sorrow to (towards?) me" I guess I'm a sucker for personification and giving tangibility to the intangible. |
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Sep 24 2004, 07:14 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
whoah personification nice words lol wassssup master
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Sep 24 2004, 07:15 PM
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SOS Brigade!! Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 |
lolz sry master you want me 2 change it? lolz
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Sep 27 2004, 03:28 AM
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i like the repitition...
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Oct 5 2004, 05:42 PM
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 don't worry, be happy~ Group: Member Posts: 1,538 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 15,899 |
omg!! that's a sweet poem...... so sweet is making me want to cry... lol, i'm a weakling, i'll admit that.
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