a photograph i should have taken, my view on love |
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 Sep 24 2004, 04:31 AM
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 creepy heather  Group: Official Member Posts: 4,208 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,580  |
The napkin was steamed to where it looked like a moist cloud, towering over the modern soup cup; it was so mellow-dramatic, and pretty--I regret just throwing it away--I could have sat in another room watching it harden-returning to a more calloused version of what it used to be, just as young girl’s hearts do, after they have fallen in and out of love (When romantic things like lying naked in the bathtub together just don’t seem to fill her heart any more); or taken a picture to keep in mind the effect-how full the napkin looked and felt-not having to see the warm soup’s perspiration slowly evaporate-trickling down it’s sides, as if it were bleeding all over the cup, and dramatically spilling onto the counter top
theres no certain style to this i just wrote exactly what was flowing through my mind |
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Sep 24 2004, 09:03 AM
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SOS Brigade!! Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 |
wow nicely done... it seems like theres a certain meaning behind it but i can't figure it out... good job =P love the uniquness
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Sep 24 2004, 11:05 AM
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creepy heather Group: Official Member Posts: 4,208 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,580 |
QUOTE(rainnydaiis @ Sep 24 2004, 9:03 AM) wow nicely done... it seems like theres a certain meaning behind it but i can't figure it out... good job =P love the uniquness eh its basically about how after each relationship i go through my heart just a little more colder and dried up than it used to be thanks :) i appreciate the commentt! |
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Sep 24 2004, 02:19 PM
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cb=bullshit. Group: Member Posts: 1,783 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,793 |
QUOTE(Heathasm @ Sep 24 2004, 3:31 AM) theres no certain style to this i just wrote exactly what was flowing through my mind i do that ALL the time... So I know exactly how that is... but it sucks when i get carried away and it makes no sense at all..Heh.. I like it! =] |
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Sep 24 2004, 02:41 PM
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 Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Finally! I haven't seen great work in a while.
Very well done - The imagery and metaphors make your piece more of a delight. The tone also suits well. Keep it up, Hope to see more of your writing. |
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Sep 25 2004, 07:32 PM
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creepy heather Group: Official Member Posts: 4,208 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,580 |
QUOTE(MasteRxKiD @ Sep 24 2004, 2:41 PM) Finally! I haven't seen great work in a while. Very well done - The imagery and metaphors make your piece more of a delight. The tone also suits well. Keep it up, Hope to see more of your writing. cool, glad you think, i have alot to wite so i wll post more |
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Sep 26 2004, 01:15 AM
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 APPLE Group: Member Posts: 2,989 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 39,182 |
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Sep 26 2004, 02:22 AM
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creepy heather Group: Official Member Posts: 4,208 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,580 |
QUOTE(xSonia @ Sep 26 2004, 1:15 AM) Deleted deleted??? |
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