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 Sep 11 2004, 12:35 AM
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 LunchboxXx  Group: Member Posts: 1,789 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,810  |
I’m walking home at 11:30 P.M.
From a night that would start like any other Kids put down their straight razors and handguns And found an alternative method of self-destruction The weapon of choice tonight was alcohol My chest hollowed out As the girl I care most for Defended herself in her suicidal habit As the people I care about unearthed it from it’s hiding spot And, shrouded in darkness, began their ritual As I watch with the most bitter façade My eyes are lead to the one I care for most Arms folded, head looking down Eather wishing to join or joining me in disgust The steaks grew too high for those shadows So they fluttered to an empty garage Me and my fellow absent victim We decided to get a jump start on her trek home. Friendly faces helped lighten my discontent And common Ill will for our blind allies Leading to interrogation with a single sillable: Why? The thoughts ensuing are not to my knowledge But I can only hope they weren’t discarded And as we reached the corner of her house, I held her I held her tighter than I can remember I said “I know this will sound cheesy But I’m really proud of you And your decisions tonight” Then I felt something in my eye And I hear my voice quivering And I continued “I just need to tell you that I really care about you… a lot…” And whether she felt me squeeze tighter Or felt a tear on her shoulder Or heard my voice breaking Or heard my words She hugged me back For the first time in a long time And it was that point in time I could say to myself Without lying I am not a failure |
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Sep 11 2004, 01:49 PM
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cb=bullshit. Group: Member Posts: 1,783 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,793 |
 Brilliant and wonderfully done.
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Sep 12 2004, 02:10 AM
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LunchboxXx Group: Member Posts: 1,789 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,810 |
oh man. i actually tear up every time i read this.
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Sep 12 2004, 03:22 PM
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 eeny meeny miny mo Group: Member Posts: 60 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 42,008 |
I have to say this was beautifully put together...
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Sep 12 2004, 03:41 PM
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 creepy heather Group: Official Member Posts: 4,208 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,580 |
 got all watery-eyed when i read that!
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Sep 18 2004, 04:11 PM
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 Dark Saga Group: Member Posts: 101 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 48,315 |
You like Dimmu Borgir, that's acceptable.
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Sep 18 2004, 06:00 PM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 3,102 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,162 |
Lovely.
Fantastic. Absolutely brilliant. Wonderful job. |
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Sep 21 2004, 04:03 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 7,025 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 4,051 |
thats amazing... i'm crying
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Sep 21 2004, 06:19 PM
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LunchboxXx Group: Member Posts: 1,789 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,810 |
QUOTE(Gypsy Eyes @ Sep 21 2004, 4:03 PM) thats amazing... i'm crying me too. thank you
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Sep 21 2004, 06:25 PM
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 freedom Group: Member Posts: 844 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 31,358 |
Wow, that was amazing.
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