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| *CrackedRearView* |
 Aug 14 2004, 04:33 PM
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For what it's worth, I think you're pretty,
For what it's worth, I think you're smart. For what it's worth, I think you're witty, And for what it's worth, please take my heart. For what it's worth, I want your love, For what it's worth, will you be mine? For what it's worth, you're what I dream of, And for what it's worth, for you I pine. For what it's worth, please take my hand, For what it's worth, I know it's rough. For what it's worth, with you I'll stand, For what it's worth is not enough. |
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Aug 14 2004, 07:14 PM
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*claps*
awesome |
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| *CrackedRearView* |
Aug 14 2004, 11:17 PM
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It's a fraction of the length I wanted it to be, but I extend my gratitude nonetheless.
Thank you for the feedback. I want both positive and negative feedback -- I strive to be a better writer everyday. |
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Aug 14 2004, 11:56 PM
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 Senior Member  Group: Member Posts: 1,384 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 37,337 |
wen it comes to writing n stuff, there is no negative.
all freestyle lol realli good poem/story |
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Aug 15 2004, 12:11 AM
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 Pimp Status Group: Member Posts: 640 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 1,200 |
Props.... Great job
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| *CrackedRearView* |
Aug 15 2004, 12:31 AM
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QUOTE(F1R3B4T @ Aug 14 2004, 10:56 PM) wen it comes to writing n stuff, there is no negative. all freestyle lol realli good poem/story I feel there can be negatives... Or at least repairs...if you fixed a verse and made it sound better to my liking, I would change it for good and give you some credit...I always like negative/corrective feedback. |
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Aug 15 2004, 09:20 AM
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 Crying Behind Blind Eyes Group: Member Posts: 257 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 7,967 |
QUOTE For what it's worth, will you be mine. I really like this poem, but the above line does for some reason erk me. I dunno, it's probably just me. But aside from that, this is an awesome poem. |
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Aug 15 2004, 12:13 PM
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 Your love is a razorblade kiss ♥ Group: Member Posts: 1,794 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 9,959 |
i lyk it
 itz cute!
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Aug 16 2004, 05:41 AM
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 and they say imitation is flattering Group: Member Posts: 1,337 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,269 |
QUOTE(CrackedRearView @ Aug 15 2004, 12:31 AM) I feel there can be negatives... Or at least repairs...if you fixed a verse and made it sound better to my liking, I would change it for good and give you some credit...I always like negative/corrective feedback. I don't see any real problems with it. Maybe the "for you I pine" line, but you really don't have any choices with that one. |
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| *Azarel* |
Jan 18 2006, 01:40 AM
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Wow, I could've sworn that I commented on this piece before. I like this because it's short and sweet. It's easily related to and an easy read.
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