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 Aug 10 2004, 06:45 AM
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 What the fack.  Group: Official Member Posts: 6,164 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 8,519  |
Um, I wrote this a while ago. 'Posted it on my xanga, and so I guess I'll post it here. Tell me what you think.
No Longer Living I let those words just pass me by Turn around and walk away Blinking away these tears, before I cry I guess I've never been good enough Never been much of a friend I guess I just can't meet up with your standards And so now, I guess this is the end I'll let you live your life As God intended it to be Because now I know that your life Should have never crossed paths with me It feels as if everything around me is no longer alive And now I can recall, that one time when they said That pain can never hurt When everyone around you is dead I'll never regret that time When I met you, on that one day But the one thing I'll always regret Is when I couldn't keep you around to stay |
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Aug 10 2004, 08:37 AM
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o0o, thats pretty good, me likes
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Aug 10 2004, 10:10 AM
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 Your love is a razorblade kiss ♥ Group: Member Posts: 1,794 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 9,959 |
oooh, i lyk it
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Aug 10 2004, 10:49 AM
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awwwwww...its so sad... Great job on it none the less
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Aug 11 2004, 03:18 AM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 1,384 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 37,337 |
wh0a... i lyk dat
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Aug 11 2004, 02:04 PM
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 who again? Group: Member Posts: 555 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 31,458 |
so flawless, very neat and to the point, i feel the emotion, your poetry pieces so far are great. keep it up.
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Jun 11 2005, 11:19 PM
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 sunshiine Group: Member Posts: 1,080 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,360 |
its good =) very meaningful
i especially like "I'll never regret that time When I met you, on that one day But the one thing I'll always regret Is when I couldn't keep you around to stay " |
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Jun 12 2005, 12:24 AM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you! Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
Wow, beautifully written. Me loves this! Why is the first stanza only 3 lines?
I love these lines: 'Because now I know that your life Should have never crossed paths with me' But it would make more sense if you said: 'Because now I know that you Should have never crossed paths with me' Great job! 
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Jun 12 2005, 03:25 AM
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 I'll never be who I was again.. Group: Member Posts: 2,886 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 77,981 |
I like it..
Its sad though.. 
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Jun 12 2005, 03:27 AM
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 Senior Member Group: Posts: 8,274 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 8,001 |
does that means .. she died ?
greeeeeeat job. |
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Jun 12 2005, 08:07 AM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 58 Joined: Jun 2005 Member No: 151,278 |
great job!
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