Hopelessness, Help retitle yeah? :D Options

[Ekay]

This heart of mine feigns for what it cannot have. For what it cannot have, it would give anything, clothes off its back, jewels, the very world if she had ever asked for it. Yet, the question begging to be answered is, why must it desire what eludes its very grasp? Is it curiosity? Or is it the very beauty of her that keeps it entranced? Whatever the reason, whatever the cause, whatever the desire, it seems that she is behind it all. She is the reason why this heart beats restlessly and she is why it is kept up feverishly all night without aim or resolve. The only way to stall what resides in this chest is to be with her, hear her voice, and feel her touch. So long as nothing severs this relationship with her. Then this heart has no fear for what awaits it next. For nothing is more horrid than the inability to speak with her, to be with her, or to touch her. Perhaps in time, these qualms in my chest will slow. But at the moment they show no sign of stopping. Regardless, will she ever feel the same way that this heart feels for her? If only questions like these could be answered with simplicity…



//edit::change title to forlorn..if anything..thank you :D

[mono_logue]

that is how i currently feel about this one girl.. very strange and coincidental
it was great reading that!

[sakaitone]

It's an extremely romantic piece of writing. To rename the title, you could go with a few synonyms to hopelessness:

irremediable:
impossible to remedy or correct or redress

incurable:
incapable of being cured

forlorn:
marked by or showing hopelessness
or
Appearing sad or lonely because deserted or abandoned.

despondent:
without or almost without hope

irreparable:
impossible to repair, rectify, or amend

Personally, I think that forlorn is the best out of this bunch of words but I don't think hopelessness is a bad title, it's just really long.

[Ekay]

hahah romantic really? i guess. anyways. forlorn is nice :D and hopelessness is too long. that's why i was asking for a retitle :] thank you sakaitone.

[sakaitone]

hahah romantic really? i guess. anyways. forlorn is nice :D and hopelessness is too long. that's why i was asking for a retitle :] thank you sakaitone.

You welcome.

You don't think it's romantic? If a guy gave this to me and said he wrote this about me, I would date him in a heartbeat, knowing me I would probably even go as far as to tackle hug him right then and there. (Well, aside from the facts that I need to know that he isn't like a stalker/rapist/serial killer or anything wierd like that.)

[mono_logue]

does this somehow relate to your life.. or did it just come out-of-the-blue
just wondering

[Ekay]

You welcome.

You don't think it's romantic? If a guy gave this to me and said he wrote this about me, I would date him in a heartbeat, knowing me I would probably even go as far as to tackle hug him right then and there. (Well, aside from the facts that I need to know that he isn't like a stalker/rapist/serial killer or anything wierd like that.)

hahahah that's nice. tackle / hug. and i'm no stalker or some shit. i'm 16 hahah xD and to mono_logue, it's both. i was listening to Yiruma - Kiss the Rain when i wrote it. everything there is basically true about my life. but all of that was written within an hour off the top of my head. :D

[sakaitone]

hahahah that's nice. tackle / hug. and i'm no stalker or some shit. i'm 16 hahah xD and to mono_logue, it's both. i was listening to Yiruma - Kiss the Rain when i wrote it. everything there is basically true about my life. but all of that was written within an hour off the top of my head. :D

Aren't 16 year old boys (I'm like 99.5% sure you're a boy but I could be wrong) and rapists the same thing? They're both horny as hell. If this is really about a girl you like, just give her the damn thing and say that you wrote it for her unless she's taken...Don't want to be a home wrecker but hey don't listen to me, this isn't the relationship forum.

Anyway, did you write more about the topic of unrequited love because seriously Hopelessness was really romantic, it was better than what I've seen some sixteen year olds write.

[Ekay]

yes i am a guy. but i can also control my urges very well thank you very much. :D and no she's not taken. of that i'm sure. and yeah i wrote other pieces about it i guess. but i didn't post them in here. or did i...hmm check the new topic made by My Cinderella. but i've been writing since 7th or 8th grade, so my writing has had time to grow and progress from what it used to be.

it was better than what I've seen some sixteen year olds write

thanks for that remark :D i'm honored. i guess you can label me as a hopeless romantic. xD

[sakaitone]

yeah i wrote other pieces about it i guess. but i didn't post them in here. or did i...hmm check the new topic made by My Cinderella. but i've been writing since 7th or 8th grade

Ohh, did not see that new topic, I'm a "overlooker". I'll check that out and read some of your other pieces!