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makes you think..., ...so sad
lozerface87
post Jun 3 2004, 09:42 PM
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Once on a yellow piece of paper with green lines

he wrote a poem

And called it "Chops"

because that was the name of his dog

And that's what it was all about

And his teacher gave him an A

and a gold star

And his mother hung it on the kitchen door

and read it to his aunts

That was the year Father Tracy

took all the kids to the zoo

And he let them sing on the bus

And his little sister was born

with tiny toenails and no hair

And his mother and father kissed a lot

And the girl around the corner sent him a

Valentine signed with a row of X's

and he had to ask his father what the X's meant

And his father always tucked him into bed at night

And was always there to do it

Once on a piece of white paper with blue lines

he wrote a poem

And he called it "Autumn"

Because that was the name of the season

And that's what it was all about

And his teacher gave him an A

and asked him to write more clearly

And his mother never hung it on the kitchen door

because of its new paint

And the kids told him

that Father Tracy smoked cigars

And left butts on the pews

And sometimes they would burn holes

That was the year his sister got glasses

with thick lenses and black frames

And the girl around the corner laughed

when he asked her to go see Santa Claus

And the kids told him why

his mother and father kissed a lot

And his father never tucked him in bed at night

And his father got mad

when he cried for him to do it.





Once on a piece of paper torn from his notebook

he wrote a poem

And he called it "Innocence: A Question"

because that was the question about his girl

And that's what it was all about

And his professor gave him an A

and a strange steady look

And his mother never hung it on the kitchen door

because he never showed her

That was the year Father Tracy died

And he forgot how the end

of the Apostle's Creed went

And he caught his sister

making out on the back porch

And his mother and father never kissed

or even talked

And the girl around the corner

wore too much makeup

That made him cough when he kissed her

but he kissed her anyway

because it was the thing to do

And at three A.M. he tucked himself into bed

his father snoring loudly

That's why on the back of a brown paper bag

he tried another poem

And he called it "Absolutely Nothing"

Because that's what it was really all about

And he gave himself an A

and a slash on each damned wrist

And he hung it on the bathroom door

because he didn't think

he could reach the kitchen.



wow i wish i knew who wrote it.
 
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post Jun 7 2004, 09:32 AM
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hmmmm it's a bit interesting, but still... is this supposed to be a poem or a story?
 
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post Jun 8 2004, 02:36 AM
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its interesting..but i kind of dont get it ermm.gif maybe im slow..
 
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post Jun 8 2004, 04:12 AM
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woah i been hearing alot of suicide poems lately
 
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post Jun 8 2004, 11:49 AM
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Perhaps a foreshadowing of things to come?
 
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post Jun 8 2004, 11:49 AM
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EDIT: Sorry, double post.
 
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post Jun 19 2004, 02:53 PM
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...its about him growing older and realizing how bad things really are -_- hahaha
 
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post Jun 22 2004, 08:34 AM
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wow...thats really deep...
 
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post Jun 22 2004, 09:03 AM
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Wow, that's a really good poem... It's really sad, but again, very good and really deep...
^_^
 
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post Jul 7 2004, 11:30 AM
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wow... that poem is so... wow...
 
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post Jul 7 2004, 11:47 AM
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man...

that's a fine writing...

but i'm tired of sad stuff on this board. i'm gunna write somthing happy!
 
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post Jul 7 2004, 11:51 AM
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wow
 
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post Jul 12 2004, 05:10 PM
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that poem...was...so....


moving... mellow.gif
 
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post Jul 12 2004, 05:12 PM
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Have you enter the poetry contt this was good
 
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post Aug 1 2004, 06:47 PM
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aw its depressing..
 

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