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Diffidence
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post Feb 12 2006, 10:11 PM
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DIFFIDENCE

To devise and comprise
A comment, a group of words,
A sound byte of affection
To describe, and to portray it,
That would be a crime against dignity.

A painter’s impression would show
My befuddled expression,
And one could see the words
Glibly gliding from my gums,
The air gently pressing on their bellies.

And they’d be scripted on a
Whim; carelessly not sans-serif,
A subtle ten point font blanketing
The verdant surrounding,
Calling for her with idiosyncratic rhythm.

But they’d be insufficient, they wouldn’t
Do justice to my feelings,
And I’d be like a child in a playroom
Shifting and turning his learning blocks,
Searching for the right combination.

And in the end I’d be frustrated
To the point of watery eyes and saline,
Dripping down my rosy cheeks
And framing my quivering lips,
Quivering at their inability to say the right thing.
 
illumineering
post Feb 12 2006, 10:40 PM
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I love Havasupai
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That's magnificent! The imagery of the last two stanzas builds to a masterful conclusion...

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And framing my quivering lips,
Quivering at their inability to say the right thing.


Bravo!
 
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post Jan 16 2007, 02:01 PM
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fell in love with a boy
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I really am embarrassed that I never read any of these.

It all ties in so well..
 

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