Curse this nightmare, Say it aint so my love. Options

[*iNyCxShoRT*]

Curse this Nightmare

And it seemed that her whole world crashed upon her when he said those very words,
How that 3 worded phrase could nip her hard like hungry black birds
She couldn't believe how she fell for that love song, that love letter, his 3 o clock phone calls,
and all she can do now; is watch her hands tremble and the blood from the razor that falls.
She stared at his picture by her bedside and thrashed her arms and cried
She couldn't get it out of her head why he might of lied
What did she do to deserve it? She'd rather die than to watch this be
She saw them once, holding hands. She yelled; THATS SUPPOSED TO BE ME!
He cheated. Why would he have done such a thing.
She never did anything to him, infact he made her heart sing
She then stood up and wiped away her tears
and she promised herself that he would no longer be the reason for her fears
Her pain would stop right when she was done crying
but when you said you'd never leave...she whispered please tell me you weren't lying.

Eh...it's not the best. But I was bored.

[KissMe2408]

What did she do to deserve it? She'd rather die than to watch this be
She saw them once, holding hands. She yelled; THATS SUPPOSED TO BE ME

^ I loved that line right there!

I think you did a nice job with this :) Very dramatic.
Thanks for sharing it <3

[Bobblehead425]

Fabulous

I was going to say I love it, but that's not enough.


I don't know why but I enjoy the hungry black bird part. hm.

[Paradox of Life]

Wow, that's really deep. I like it. I agree with Katie about that line. I don't know why, but the title doesn't seem to fit, but I guess that's just me. Good job.

[*iNyCxShoRT*]

Thank you everyone for your feedback. Paradox of Life (Sorry I don't know your name) mentioned that the title doesn't seem to fit. I agree, any ideas for a better title?