Little girl, her brutal story |
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| *iNyCxShoRT* |
 Nov 12 2005, 02:47 PM
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Little girl with the flowered dress
The little girl with her flowered dress, with her beady eyes that never rest. Her mom's a druggie, her father's in jail, her only friend's without a tail. As a child she watched her sister slowly die, yet she was not old enough to shed tears or cry. If you look at her arms, and there you'll see cuts and wounds where they aren't supposed to be. Finally one day she could take no more pain, no more tainted smiles or blood that fell like rain. She pulled the trigger and ended her misery right there, gone off to Heaven, with a smile she never got to wear. |
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Nov 13 2005, 01:19 PM
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Beautiful work. I got all choked up at the end
 It's perfect.
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Nov 13 2005, 08:33 PM
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Ohmygod. I love it.
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Nov 13 2005, 09:28 PM
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 some reason i feel alone...guess cus my true self is never shown Group: Member Posts: 303 Joined: Sep 2005 Member No: 246,804 |
so do i
its so sad im one of the people that thinks that life is very valuable |
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Nov 18 2005, 07:01 PM
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it's so sad...
i like it alot though esp. the ending |
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Nov 18 2005, 07:02 PM
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<3 Group: Member Posts: 3,657 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 64,493 |
sorry double post
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Nov 18 2005, 08:00 PM
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 Hold my hand lets chase the sun Group: Member Posts: 142 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 48,942 |
omg thats sooo sad!!!!
its really good though!!!
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Nov 19 2005, 11:17 PM
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 with.much.love <3 Group: Member Posts: 313 Joined: Nov 2005 Member No: 286,943 |
^me too!
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Nov 24 2005, 11:06 AM
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QUOTE(AilVl33 @ Nov 19 2005, 6:18 PM) i looooove the end - with a smile she never got to wear.  Thanks  to everyone for all the feedback
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Nov 24 2005, 12:10 PM
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Does your school have power of the pen? YOu'd do well their if they do and wonderful! Well not wonderful on how the end is, I mean the writing, gah it was sad but terribly well written (Did that make any sense? O.o)
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| *iNyCxShoRT* |
Nov 24 2005, 05:39 PM
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^ I think I know what you mean lol. No I don't think my school has that program? Yeah, the ending is like the happily ever after for her.
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Dec 27 2005, 12:42 AM
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I gave you everything ... Group: Member Posts: 81 Joined: Dec 2005 Member No: 334,433 |
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