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Eternal Syn ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 ![]() |
Reminiscing about the past, thinking of what was, and dreaming of what could have been. Wishin` and believin` that we were still together is the part of me that's stuck in the past. The past that was us, and us no longer exists. Only in the past and in my memories does "us" still exist forevermore. Wishin` and wonderin` of what could have been is the dreamer in me. One dreams for us even though the grim reality is that "us" is never to come around again. And the other remembers what we used to be. Stuck in the past, but dreaming of the future. This bears the question of wondering, how much of me, pays attention to the present?
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![]() CheccMate Foo! ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 839 Joined: Dec 2006 Member No: 487,531 ![]() |
Hey I really like the ending man. Got me thinking.
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Eternal Syn ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 ![]() |
haha thanks man
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This is brilliant, I loved it.
![]() I like how you referred back and forth between the differences and the ended came in perfectly. |
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Eternal Syn ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 ![]() |
hahah funny thing was that i though of the ending first and tried to wrap it up like that. thanks for the feedback though
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*jayen* |
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Eternal Syn ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 ![]() |
yeah..usually, it's think of the first line. then build off of that, but this was an interesting way to write.
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![]() CheccMate Foo! ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 839 Joined: Dec 2006 Member No: 487,531 ![]() |
wow after the last line? nice creative piece.
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![]() Home is where your rump rests! ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 4,235 Joined: Aug 2006 Member No: 451,969 ![]() |
That last line is magnificent, good job. :]
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