Bone Children, a touch macabre |
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 May 25 2005, 03:05 PM
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 Another ditch in the road... you keep moving  Group: Member Posts: 6,281 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,152  |
trees scream elegies
of souls lost to banality fatalities as bone children haunt the blood pools willows whip their weeping limbs at passersby and bone children haunt the blood pools twisted boughs menace the innocent while demonic howls chase life from the hopeless conjour an empty path past where the bone children haunt teh blood pools a ripple 'cross the blood pool a heart beat from the blood pool life pulses from the blood pool but bone children hunt the blood pool dragged back into the blood pool brittle bones snap or is it a twig? from the screaming trees nothing could grow here near the blood pools a sickly light casts no shadows over the macabre a palor from a dream not a dream all thats left are the bone children by the blood pools |
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May 25 2005, 03:11 PM
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 fell in love with a boy Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965 |
You've really done it...
*nods in envy* Good work James. |
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May 25 2005, 06:55 PM
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wow...james, thats amazing. i love the words you use, they just make it so powerful. great job.
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Jun 30 2005, 02:28 PM
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Another ditch in the road... you keep moving Group: Member Posts: 6,281 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,152 |
lol...
i was looking back through the archives of the writing section trying to find a couple of pieces (my teacher asked me to submit something for a school magazine) and i remembered this and i jus thought i would say that i based my english lit final on this poem, by turning it into a piece of descriptive writing for the prompt 'describe a nightmare world' just saying also, thank you steph and lindsay |
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Jul 1 2005, 10:47 PM
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Brie Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 10,172 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,548 |
Wow...
 Excellent work, James!I love all of the words you've chosen.... great vocabulary. :) Lovely job! |
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Jul 3 2005, 12:18 AM
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fell in love with a boy Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965 |
QUOTE(MarchHare2UrAlice @ Jun 30 2005, 2:28 PM) lol... i was looking back through the archives of the writing section trying to find a couple of pieces (my teacher asked me to submit something for a school magazine) and i remembered this and i jus thought i would say that i based my english lit final on this poem, by turning it into a piece of descriptive writing for the prompt 'describe a nightmare world' just saying also, thank you steph and lindsay  this reminds me of a book I read.. about this kid who was an orphan.. and he went back in time through a grave... and then when he came back he was reunited with his parents. i can't think of the name... |
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Jul 9 2005, 01:31 AM
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Mr. Hottie Group: Member Posts: 406 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 104,225 |
i like it!
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