i figured i should put one of my poems up.



i am no longer a person.
i am the nothingness that you've created.
u left me heartbroken.
u ran and took my possesions.
u took my heart, my soul, and my will to live.
i have nothing now.
i have a heartbeat but it is no longer the same as it used to be.
a real heartbeat has something to live for but i dont
i am filled with pain, sorrow, regret, and all the emotions that you've given me
but u dont seem to care because this is nothing but a game to u
a game to leave a person with no life, with no will to love anyone else
so this game is over for u...
why is it not over for me?


yup so thats the first poem that i put up.

Awesome. Post more!

I like the subject and I like the poem...but if I could give a quick idea for you to think about I promise it will be a good one:-)

like I said, I like the poem, but you've explained everything in such great detail that it makes it hard to read it all. maybe try shortening your sentences a little bit and take out words that don't need to be there like "because" or "I am"...

just some advice, and if that's your style of writing I shouldn't tell you how to write. poetry is an expression, so do it as it feels best to you:-)

I like that line the best. :-) Keep up the good work!