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My once ago friend, A poem that I wrote
CandyPop
post Feb 20 2010, 10:39 AM
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This is a poem that I wrote for Creative Writing I, last semester. It is going to get published in this laureate magazine at my school.

My Once Ago Friend

As I picked up a lonely flower from the earth
I thoughtfully pulled a delicate petal
As I was doing so, I reminisced over you
My once ago friend who vanished
With no farewell leaving me behind
To sink to drown in my memories
Of your existence
My once ago friend, I thought of you
As if you were greater than a field of gold
I would swim in the deepest ocean
To keep the closeness between us
My once ago friend I smiled for you
Even though you cared for me weakly
In return for my kindness to you
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As I came back to reality
The wind began to blow swiftly
Causing my delicate petal to drift away
Leaving me behind as I watched it
Move on neglecting the past
I now realized that I should do the same
 
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post Feb 20 2010, 12:44 PM
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This is really nice thumbsup.gif
 
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post Feb 20 2010, 03:30 PM
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QUOTE(Uso @ Feb 20 2010, 12:44 PM) *
This is really nice thumbsup.gif


Thank you! _smile.gif
 
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post Feb 24 2010, 01:34 AM
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this is not one of those poems you say is good just to be nice, it really is good. keep up the awesome writing
 
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post Feb 24 2010, 03:06 PM
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QUOTE(Paladin @ Feb 24 2010, 01:34 AM) *
this is not one of those poems you say is good just to be nice, it really is good. keep up the awesome writing


Thank you!
 
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post Feb 28 2010, 12:19 AM
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QUOTE(Paladin @ Feb 23 2010, 10:34 PM) *
this is not one of those poems you say is good just to be nice, it really is good. keep up the awesome writing




For real, keep it up :)
 
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post Feb 28 2010, 08:57 AM
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Thanks! =D
 
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post Mar 31 2010, 05:29 PM
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I really like this poem!! I just made one that's kinda similar to this but it's more dramatic cuz I'm into spoken word. But kudos!!
 

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