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"I am Me"
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post Dec 15 2009, 02:21 AM
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"I am Me"

I am not defined by career, education, social status, physical appearance, nor my failures.
I am a genuinely good person that has slowly compromised their values.
I am a corrupted person reconnecting their soul to the spirit.
I have become defined by what I've let myself become. But I know who I am.
I have not been myself, truly. Like a lesser parallel form of myself.
I now want only to be me. Everything else will follow.
 
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post Dec 15 2009, 12:22 PM
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thank you for the compliment. i appreciate your thoughts
 
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post Dec 15 2009, 04:47 PM
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Content is pretty good, but it doesn't flow very well. It's a bit awkward to read.
 
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post Dec 15 2009, 06:37 PM
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i didnt write this with the intent of making poetry (an entry in a diary of sorts). im happy you liked the content and would like to improve my poetry skills

thanks for the feedback itanium
 
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post Jan 23 2010, 01:05 AM
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From a poetry standpoint, I think that it works. Give or take a word. It's good. How long have you been writing?
 
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post Jan 24 2010, 09:10 PM
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living and feeling all my life, just got to writing about a year ago. you have some good stuff i enjoy reading your poetry/stories as well
 
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post Jan 25 2010, 07:42 AM
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Thanks, it's been awhile since I've been on here. I still write, I just don't post anymore. I've gotten too lazy to and plus, no one ever really gives feedback here anymore so :/
 
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post Jan 26 2010, 09:48 PM
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this is not the best forum for artistic forms of expression. i think im gonna try and locate one. ill let you know what i find
 

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