i am not polished., mispent adulthood?! haha. |
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 May 21 2010, 09:22 AM
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 fell in love with a boy  Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965  |
i am not polished. i was never ripe. i never went to college and i remain contrite. my arms are not for holding, but for shoving things away. my thoughts seem an endless record & my favorite excuses always play in the unkempt diary to my friends on the street in the smokey nightlife hours to the parents i still meet life is a bag of sours for me, a garbage can of regret. and here's the worst excuse of all "I don't think I'm ready yet."
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Oct 1 2010, 10:18 AM
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This was excellent for me. Held my attention and expressed many different emotions in it.
This was good. As a reader, I enjoyed the short time I've just spent reading this. I would save this little poem, even if a teacher tells you this isn't good or whatever. Turn in what your teacher wants but save this one regardless. 
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Oct 4 2010, 03:38 AM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
dope and true. i love the impact of the last line as well. really well done
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