Graduation Flyer, First Flyer Options

[deteam]

Feedback is welcomed, first flyer so yaa ... gimme that advice on what to fix


Edit: I know i spelled graduation wrong lol

Version 2


Edited it with some of the things you said.


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[HeartOfPandora]

I'm tired, so this critique is not going to look very pretty:

Too many fonts, keep it to two maximum.
Needs space for a footer, even if it's got no text and just a continuation of the design.
Not really sure I'm feeling the background choice. Maybe it's the colours?
^ The colours just don't sit right with me, too much brown is the impression I get. *
Speaking of brown, the name blends with the champagne - it should POP.
Not sure what the 5 stars are doing at the bottom, they don't fit.
"Amanda's" overlaps the content box by like 7 pixels - DON'T.
^ The content boxes shouldn't all be connected by that strip of black, it looks weird and out of place.
^ Also, they're really rigid, while the rest of the design is more free flowing.
The champagne glasses look like good quality stock - the roses do not.
^ But why do they fade out? Use the rest of the image to create a bookended effect.

* try picking one colour. Use only shades or hues of that colour, and THEN pick one (or a max of two) other colours to compliment. Brown does not scream "party time!" to me, it screams "poop!" in a very unattractive voice. You want your party-time voice to be sexy, inviting and enticing. Just like the party should be. OR ELSE IT WILL BE LAME.

[deteam]

I'm tired, so this critique is not going to look very pretty:

Too many fonts, keep it to two maximum.
Needs space for a footer, even if it's got no text and just a continuation of the design.
Not really sure I'm feeling the background choice. Maybe it's the colours?
^ The colours just don't sit right with me, too much brown is the impression I get. *
Speaking of brown, the name blends with the champagne - it should POP.
Not sure what the 5 stars are doing at the bottom, they don't fit.
"Amanda's" overlaps the content box by like 7 pixels - DON'T.
^ The content boxes shouldn't all be connected by that strip of black, it looks weird and out of place.
^ Also, they're really rigid, while the rest of the design is more free flowing.
The champagne glasses look like good quality stock - the roses do not.
^ But why do they fade out? Use the rest of the image to create a bookended effect.

* try picking one colour. Use only shades or hues of that colour, and THEN pick one (or a max of two) other colours to compliment. Brown does not scream "party time!" to me, it screams "poop!" in a very unattractive voice. You want your party-time voice to be sexy, inviting and enticing. Just like the party should be. OR ELSE IT WILL BE LAME.

so much 4 being tired lol... actually some really helpful critique, I tried some of your ideas.... let me know what you think

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[HeartOfPandora]

Aw yeah, the colours are definitely much better. You still have three fonts going on, though, and I'm not really certain how that block font matches the fancy one. It's a cool font, tru dat, but it looks a bit out of place. I'd maybe try a clean serif for all the information, and use that fancy font for headings (Amanda's, Graduation Bash, the date and maybe the RSVP spot). That way no one has to strain to read it, but it still looks classy.

And I like that you changed the roses into vectors. On the other hand, the background to the glasses looks fake lol. They were obviously photographed on a white background, but being that they're glass and transparent, they should at least reflect background colour you picked. Too lazy to think how, but it wouldn't be too hard (just don't oversaturate it...they are still a bit opaque IRL).

The key with things like this is consistency. If you use glow on one font, use it everywhere that font appears.

PS: Don't capitalise all the words in the info. It should be "Come party with us..." and only proper nouns should be capitalised.


Looks much better, though, so keep up the good work.

[deteam]

Aw yeah, the colours are definitely much better. You still have three fonts going on, though, and I'm not really certain how that block font matches the fancy one. It's a cool font, tru dat, but it looks a bit out of place. I'd maybe try a clean serif for all the information, and use that fancy font for headings (Amanda's, Graduation Bash, the date and maybe the RSVP spot). That way no one has to strain to read it, but it still looks classy.

And I like that you changed the roses into vectors. On the other hand, the background to the glasses looks fake lol. They were obviously photographed on a white background, but being that they're glass and transparent, they should at least reflect background colour you picked. Too lazy to think how, but it wouldn't be too hard (just don't oversaturate it...they are still a bit opaque IRL).

The key with things like this is consistency. If you use glow on one font, use it everywhere that font appears.

PS: Don't capitalise all the words in the info. It should be "Come party with us..." and only proper nouns should be capitalised.
Looks much better, though, so keep up the good work.

ok so how do i do that whole glass background thing, and also which 2 text's do you suggest i keep? should i use the "Amanda" One for both ["Amanda's" and "Graduation Bash"] and then one Simple text for all the info ?

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[abzz]

their both great!

[deteam]

their both great!

thank you

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