Blyat
Jul 9 2009, 10:32 PM
So this is the picture so far, I would love some light critique so I can improve (Ex Colouring, drawing, etc)
Thanks.
Blyat
Jul 9 2009, 10:35 PM
QUOTE(A1Bassline @ Jul 9 2009, 11:33 PM)
The necks are a bit long and the jaw looks weird to me. But everything else looks good.
Thanks :D
That helps a lot
Shelby-Zu
Jul 9 2009, 10:36 PM
i completely agree, neck looks a bit long.
but as already stated, the rest looks great!!
shading maybe? x
Maccabee
Jul 9 2009, 10:36 PM
I really love these! Nothing I can say! It doesnt look like you are trying to resemble humans, its just a different style! Keep going and show us the finished product!
datass
Jul 9 2009, 10:37 PM
ooo nice coloring. something about her nose and chin irks me. i think its the position or structure.
Blyat
Jul 9 2009, 10:39 PM
JCP: Thanks :)
Doughnut: Yeah your right the nose is irking me now, The chin is thankfully easy to fix
Thank you love :)
schizo
Jul 9 2009, 11:07 PM
I actually think the long neck looks okay on the left one, it's just the right one that looks a bit abnormal. The thing that bothers me if the position of the mouth. It looks like there is too much face to the right of it.
Other than that, I think it looks fantastic. The coloring especially looks great so far.
karmakiller
Jul 9 2009, 11:42 PM
I really like the coloring. I don't mind the long necks, but the jaw does look strange.
Joanne
Jul 9 2009, 11:44 PM
The longer necks look totally fine to me. What's bugging me are the eyes; they look like they're looking in different directions.
Blyat
Jul 10 2009, 12:29 AM
QUOTE(Joanne @ Jul 10 2009, 12:44 AM)
The longer necks look totally fine to me. What's bugging me are the eyes; they look like they're looking in different directions.
Yeah I thought the same thing too :T
manny-the-dino
Jul 10 2009, 12:44 AM
QUOTE(schizo @ Jul 9 2009, 09:07 PM)
I actually think the long neck looks okay on the left one, it's just the right one that looks a bit abnormal.
Yeah I agree. The nose on the one on the left is too pointy for my liking but it looks like you were going for a more cartoon feel so it works.
QUOTE(Joanne @ Jul 9 2009, 09:44 PM)
What's bugging me are the eyes; they look like they're looking in different directions.
Now that I look at them, I see what Joanne means.
But honestly Stef, this isn't that bad. It's really good actually. It's just little details you need to clean up. Looks nice :)
Joanne
Jul 10 2009, 01:47 AM
Yeah, what Natalia said. The style's really nice, and I love the colouring.
Blyat
Jul 10 2009, 10:00 AM
Oh and yes its more stylism than realism
Thanky you manny :) and Joanne :)
Thankfully all the details you guys are telling me are easily fixed
and when I posted this I definetly noticed the eyes too
Hopefully I can complete this tonite and ill post the finishing look
And im glad you guys like the colouring, I was trying a new technique and i was afraid this would look splitchy
Blyat
Jul 10 2009, 11:14 AM
Thank you mike ^__^
adolelolz
Jul 10 2009, 12:27 PM
I think the mouth is too low on the face, and it extends too far to the left. But other than that, it's great :D
YourSuperior
Jul 16 2009, 01:21 AM
I personally like the drawing, but the only thing that really bothers me is the chin
Blyat
Jul 19 2009, 11:35 AM
Ok So i Went back and fixed it up
HOPEFULLY you guys can see the difference, The red arrows are the areas fixed
Now I did the best i could with the eyes, the was the most tricky area to re-fix
and the right neck just ignore because clothing is going to covour that area
Before
After
Able to see a difference?
If there is anything else you think is still iffy tell me
But overall thanks so much for the Critique so-far It looks A LOT better <3
-DressYourEyelids-
Jul 19 2009, 12:27 PM
i like the changes. the overall drawing flows much better :D
synapse
Jul 19 2009, 12:28 PM
The chin, nose, and the left cheek (in our perspective) they have pink then white levels.. looks like pimples.
Blyat
Jul 19 2009, 12:42 PM
sweet Im glad you guys like it better
QUOTE(tcunningham @ Jul 19 2009, 01:28 PM)
The chin, nose, and the left cheek (in our perspective) they have pink then white levels.. looks like pimples.
ok, Got most fixed, Im not really going to realism so I kindof made the skin like that on purpose.
Yeah, Im fixing that up right now, and Yeah Im not going for realism, so The hand is purposly like that (though I do agree it could be smaller)
But im really glad you like it
Oh, and I dont know if you knew this or not, but they are actually two boys :3 (not suppose to be gay though)
Hope that doesm't Irk anyone >__<
manny-the-dino
Jul 19 2009, 06:01 PM
Wow it looks a lot better. Nice job, Stef!
Blyat
Jul 19 2009, 09:54 PM
QUOTE(manny-the-dino @ Jul 19 2009, 07:01 PM)
Wow it looks a lot better. Nice job, Stef!
Thanks Nat = 3=
Joanne
Jul 20 2009, 03:20 AM
.... they're guys?
Blyat
Jul 20 2009, 10:30 PM
QUOTE(Joanne @ Jul 20 2009, 04:20 AM)
.... they're guys?
lol yeah, I was getting this Idea from a group of art friends on Deviant-Art :3
AncientWhisper
Jul 30 2009, 01:32 PM
Ohh, lovely to see an anime/manga artist here. :3
I think you need to work on your anatomy a bit more. What bothered me most was the chin and how flat the face looked. :< The necks are still a bit too long in the sense that it looks like they're missing that muscle between the neck and the shoulders; the neck should be less straight down on both characters. (sorry I don't know anatomy when it comes to terminology). But if it's your style, there's no to need to fix if you don't want to. x]
Otherwise, I see great potential. I love the pastel-type coloring style you have and the artstyle overall. It has a soft appealing to it and the people have nice slender features.
Wonderful job!
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