Please give me constructive criticism.. I need to write a piece for school and this one took me a long time because I kept on checking over it, but I feel there is something missing. Thank you.
Hopes and Fears
By Cherie D.
You’ve given me all I had to hope
My heart is melting, it’s on the ropes
Everyday I’d hope for you to embrace me
Make me feel your warmth and security
Everyday I’d hope that it’d be true
The day you said I love you
You’ve given me all I had to fear
For I hold you quite dear
Life would be devoid of purpose if I love you
You’ve shown me friendship like I never knew
Its doesn’t matter what you do
I still have every reason to care for you
Being with you won’t make me tope or bring me to tears
You are my hopes…
You are my fears…
And I would give anything to have you here
Anyone? Sorry..I just needed some feedback