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haha this song is really weird...

wow pure crack









.. lmao

Wow.. that chorus is really starting to annoying me.

stick to ur age. i just saw u on ur vacation pic thingy.. u look teeny

good night everybody, that song made me fall asleep.

word. Thats a long song. Some of the lyrics are whack and some are pretty good. Try finding a beat and matching the lyrics with it. I reccomend shortening the song because the song would be quite lengthy. If you get a nice flow, emphasis and beat the song might be one of the betters on your album.

don't confuse my opinion w/hate
u need some space between them lines so they won't sound and look like sh*t. its all bunched together like a rhyming dictionary,
e.g. play-ray, fade-aid, terrific-scientific, circumstance-romance-trance-bboystance
i guess it's safe to say, it sucks