A Painful Wedding Gift

A single rose I held above,
Against the ebony sky,
I thought this really was true love,
But this was for goodbye,

I held it still, its petals clear,
With the moon's so haunting glow,
The hue, a crimson to match the tear,
Inviting more to flow,

I want to brush it all aside,
And continue on my way,
But now I'll never be the bride,
I were to be today,

The petals now blow in the breeze,
The wind is oh so swift,
An empty stem hovered over me,
This was my wedding gift,

Though this I hold I'll forever keep,
The last of my last lover's charm,
The thorns are digging oh so deep,
And the pain trickles down my arm...

Awesome poem, Katt! Keep up the good work, I liked it alot!

Mehehe I remember when you were like asking me for something that rhymed with "gift". Anyhoo, I love it! It rawks. ^_^

very nicely written...i like the idea too. keep it up.

aww, really cute&sad, and the flow is smooth . although ...



i personally think using 2 ''last''s in one line isnt a good idea, because it sounds too repetitive .

Yeah, I was wondering whether I should keep that or not. It depends on how you read it, but I'll try with and without it. Thanks for bringing that up.

Very nice flow, the last verse was a very nice conclusion and you had the perfect choice of words to convey the message/feeling you were trying to get across.

I loved the vibe it gave to me!!..Mysterious & enchanting...

aw i like it. emotional

You expressed yourself so amazingly. I fell in love with it by the 2nd line.

I like it..Its very sad..and has a lot of emotions..