^
Ahahahaha.

I have to say Jason. The ending is much better than the beginning though.
You had the guts to do it too. So I give you props for that.

karamelle, i love your songs...*...sick...la la*

I have never heard any of Karamelle's songs.

get a better mic and speak up some.
but good luck on you... album.

lol, exactly suzette...

Nightmare, click her siggy

Its going to take forever on Dial Up but thx Brownusugar08 and Sandra. I will tell you what I think about it in like 20 minutes

"i got the magic stick, i'm harry potter"

niiiiice.

aww thanks ya. A lot of them arent finished yet, and we have more on the way. its really flattering that u guys like em tho. makes me feel goooood haha.




lol girl you know I won't forget yall. Its the people there form the beginning that mean the most, not the onnes who come around when the money starts comin in ya know? U guys make me wanna do my happy dance! :D

^Hey I remember you. !!
[x

Wow. You sound good.

OMG karamelle I can actually hear and understand what your saying . Your group sounds like they really got it together. So far I have only listened to sick and it was sick. Nice Job.

I thought about doin that but I thought it might be considered advertising so I didnt. And thanks again u guys for the feedback :D I got up and did my happy dance lol.

Wow Karamelle, I really like your song "sick". Great job =)

okay that was lame

but nice songs karamelle i like cinnamon and pop it hard... you and kangsta should collab

Haha! this thread was made for jason but Karamelle took over...wonder why...prolly because she's better...

hahah!! thats the funniest joke I've heard.







besides, our manager wont let us collaborate with anyone cuz he doesnt want to share money haha.

oh my gosh ur crackin me up. why don't you do the honors. I cant even think of where to begin lol. Actually lemme do it. Gimme a few minutes tho.

After listening to karamelle, I would think that she's FAR better than Jason. Take notes, Kang! It's a bit poppy for me, but I've gotta give it to you, karamelle.

i'll admit, i've seen the lyrics, and they're pretty decent. But, come on, seriously, the delivery is awful. I'm mean, half he's time he's saying "uh, yeah".



imma have to agree on that. You're a great writer for the lyrics part, but maybe you should let someelsehandle the mic

well to be honest, I don't understand why, if you really love it, you would give it up after school. I mean, yeah, your lyrics totally don't flow with the track, and the things you rap about are totally unbeleiveable, but if you enjoy it, don't stop. And the track is hot. I must say tho, you are lucky to have people who want to help you out when you are so young. When I told people I wanted to be a singer when I was 13, they told me to get a real carreer. No one helped me or anything. So take advantage of that. And um...you might wanna work on rappin with a metronome so you are actually on beat.

STFU he was terrible

well, i'm sry. You're right, everyone's entitled to their opinion. I'm just brutally honest.

karamelle, maybe you could help him. you know, from a perspective of an aspiring artist?

Well, i am brutally honest. And, well, Jason sounds like one of those disney actors-turned-singers. Only he's not an actor, or at least I don't think he is.

ok ok ppl, quit dissing jason [/spam]...i don't think his music is THAT bad...

the INFAMOUS... the INFAMOUS.. kangsta!!!


his voice sounds a lot deeper than i expected.

Oh, wow, that sucked. x[ You're definetely worse than 50.

what, like one of those disney actir-gone-singer ppl. Well, they are way worse than him, i'll give him that. And its not even like the whole track his bad. THe music is nice, the lyrics are interestingly good, but the delivery is meh. I mean, I'm no rapper, but I know a thing or two about putting passion into what you do. THis guy sounds like he has no passion. He's like a drone just rappin' and just let the words flood out of him with no soul behind them. I mean, if he's talking about other rappers being shit and stuff, he has to expect that kinda criticism, especially if he's putting stuff out like that.

So I'm not allowed to give my opinion anymore?

And Jason is 13, not 12.

^ But saying he's good isn't helping either.

Was it me or did teh rap just sound like a computer generated voice program? I think less nights alone are required to 'hone' your rapping skills

the kind of response needed is constructive critisism. Telling him he sucks doesnt do much. telling him he sucks because his lyrics are unbeliveable and you cant understand him, helps him make improvements.

^ EXACTLY MY POINT!...gosh people

you make a good point. PUT MORE EXPRESSION in ur lyrics!

its not like he's all bad. I was just telling it how I heard it. But lemme get the facts that have been said by different members:

1. Step away from the mic at times so you're more audible. Other times step to the mic because you're too quiet.
2. More expression
3. Outrageous lyrics - need some improvement: "try talking about things that normal 13 year olds go through"[karamelle]
[karamelle] 4. Needs to target audience within his age range
[basick] 5. Human crack in flesh?
[natE.A]6. Get more experience and get some years under your belt before recording again (diluted version)

Did I miss anything? Basically, he's on his way, he's just not there yet.

New comments on how Jason can improve.

jason is human crack in the flesh.

try talking about things that normal 13 year olds go through. I mean, the entire idea of making money off of music is appealing to the right audience. Right now, any target audience that you COULD sell to, you won't sell to because your lyrics don't target them. The main people who buy music are 13 to 21. That is your audience. You are talking about things that only older people know about, but since you are son young, they won't take you seriously. so tone your message down a notch, and try to appeal to your age group. They are the ones who are gonna buy.

too quiet, off beat, personally kid, hit puberty before u record again

(*my brother is a rapper, my dad owns a talent agency, i go through this shit every day)

oh, and another suggestion? Try not using a computer mic? I mean, a karaoke mic has better quality. it might help.

Never once did you see me tell the people who said he sucked to STFU because they are entitled to their opinion as I am entitled to my opinion. That was not even a jab at anyone just a word of encouragement to Jason to keep pursuing what inspires him. I actually commend Jason for having the courage to try when so many others would not be willing to do the same. Once Again Good Job Kangsta.

when I rap, I sound more gangsterish.

Oh, and good job Jason.

The best way to get the best sound off your mic is to take your bottom lip off of it and back up and speak up a little. You seriously remind me of fabolous and he's a shitty rapper to begin with. I bet you spent a lot of f**king time on your lyrics... but, they really could've been better. Do you know what I should do? I should record your song over for you and you'll see how you're supposed to be doing it. Damn, someone... hand over the instrumental. I don't even listen to rap... and I know that the song you're putting out is weak. You really need to rethink your profession... I'm being serious here, as well. You're what? 12? 13?... talking about f**king girls... and some shit about a club. You're not even old enough to go to a teen nightclub. How about we be a little realistic, people? I can rip it better and it's not even my style. Hah. Pitiful.

bump...so this can be closed too.

Hah Mel, I was the one who gave you the link to the song. XD

Bumped.
Thank god.

the controversy thread got closed so i have to close this one. ;\

TOPIC CLOSED

unfortunately, this thread is part of cbnews, so it is an internal thing. controversy links to an external website, which is advertising.

thanks kyro.

no prob. just follow the rules, don't do drugs, stay in school and drink milk, ok?

and it's kryo, not kyro.

Um, then wouldn't band threads and other threads of the sort also be considered advertising? Or Controversy could've been moved to Entertainment. *Shrug* I don't know.

yes, but this is part of cbnews, which is an internal function of these forums.

i'm moving this to writing.

oh great. now i look like the mean moderator! dun dun duh