A cold and dusty mirror
With its faded, broken glass
It holds many tragic secrets
And has witnessed my dark past
I look at my reflection
And don't like what I see
A lost and bleeding little girl
Staring back at me
Her eyes are cold and distant
Her face is worn and gray
She tries to tell me something
But is not sure of what to say
A painful silence greets me
My blood is running thin
I know that I can't help her
I'm on the outside looking in
Death is coming closer
Dark shadows lurking near
I quickly soothe my mind with lies
And swallow all my fear
I look at my reflection
And don't like what I see
A hollow, empty little girl
Crying out to me

thats really good, i like the flow of it .

Wow...that is really good. It makes you think. Good job and keep expessing yourself!

^_^ thank you for the replies. that's nice of you to say so.

i agree, its well written and i love the concept behind it. keep up the great work!

Very good. It's something a little bit of everyone can understand. It's a very skillfully written poem. Keep up the good work.

I really like this poem! (=
Good job.

But maybe you should take out the 'with lies' in that line. It sounds like there's just too many words. ><



But it's still an awesome poem! <33

Hehe thank you. ^_^ And thanks for that advice.

Your really good. You know how to make words flow. Great poem.

I think it should stay. I though that was a good line and if you read it in a certain rhythm it'll fit together better. Great job! Love your word choice and everything.

Hehe thankies. ^_^ You people make me feel special. And yeah, I used "with lies" to make it flow in a particular rhythm.

i loved it..i think it's great exactly how it's written =)

^_^ Thank you. All of your comments have certainly made me feel better about my writing.

i love it! keep on writing ^_^