from awhile back:

sitting on my lap it tastes fresher in the sack-
an armada of flavor launches a surprise attack-
it sends shivers packed with power efforting smack-
another spending that of which is never a way back-

(switches beat)

Trust is a thing rarely seen on these streets with these fiends-
gotta get high, gotta stay clean. shoot, went for the first and trusted-
but was busted with this stupid vendetta while a cop issue beretta points straight at my eye as i lie with my arms straight to the sky-
deny my source as i defy my rights. decide to hide the truth-
save the betrayer and pay him back later-
return him the favor ten fold with my pig slayer-
It's gonna be a flood six inches high in the tub wit ya blood you gangsta faggot-
you cant hack it and i cant neither but i can hack you of that you can be sure proceeding the beating-
get the stead of retreating ill find you and you'll taste the chase of base pounded deleting of a human life-
your knife taken from my back will find a place in yours staring straight at your punisher-
pouring your blood from ya skin like im in a rush here-
and ill snap ya back like the rat pack's snitch should be taken, gonna smack attack and crack the spine in time to make the dogs dine like kings-

a good vocabulary does not equal dope rhymes... and please seperate your second verse into bars... nobody wants to read a whole paragraph with no places telling you when to end a line

do i need to dumb it down for you? good vocabulary is what every emcee dreams of. a lot of them are just too ignant to understand the function of a dictionary. on MTV cribs, how many times do you hear some rapper say, "yo, dis my libary. I be up in dere readin books." you dont, so many minorities revel in ignorance. No offense to those who dont. I'm talking about those who make everybody look bad. What's worse is when you have a white guy who has all the money in the world for school and every chance to excel who adopts another cultural accident of which is the spawn of circumstance as his own. It's pathetic to see wanna be's and posers. People who go from the american dream and being unique just to fit in as one of the homies.

no im sayin vocab is important but a rhyme with great vocab but no multi-sylabble rhyming, no punchlines, no creativity, and a lame concept ... good vocab is a positive trait but it doesnt make your verse nice... trust me kid... and you really shouldnt talking about the advancement of hip hop and "intellegent and conscious emcees" while you are talking about the same block episodes (cops, guns, and killin) that every garbage mainstream emcee talks about in your second verse.. interesting

by the way i think i read everything you typed on another editorial found on the internet...

It's a problem that everyone should see and besides, this rap is more of a look back at what they said, and the whole gangsta thing in a nutshell. It's about fake people who think they're dealers, which is basically cliche. This one wasn't meant to be serious serious, just serious in a threatening kind of way. Kinda like hey look how easy this is. It was also in response to this one guy i was doing "business" with. His transactions were sloppy and he almost got me caught. Regardless of former mistakes, that was just the inspiration. I rewrote something i spit in the quad.