theres a kid at my school that is just like this

Broken is the heart of the lonely child
Solid on the surface, tender and mild
Fallin to pieces inside, fallin apart
bless this lonely child with his lonely heart

The deepest of sadness, lurks behinds his eyes
Hides behind his fake smile, and little white lies
And keeps a brave face, and his world falls apart
Bless this lonely child with his lonely heart

Bullied, beaten, and teased by all of his peers
His everyday reality, is our deepest of fears
Outcasted at school, his family fallin apart
Bless this lonely child with his lonely heart

Hard to get up in the morning, why should he try?
No reasons to live, gives him more reasons to die
The world doesnt know, hes irrevirsably scarred
Bless this lonely child, with his lonely heart

Wallowing in pity, drowning in sorrow
Crying in bed, awaiting tommorow
For another day worthless living to partake
Bless this lonely child, whos ready to break

He's only happy, as he's dreaming away
Oblivious to the torture, he endured that day
A smile spreads, as he pictures life without sorrow
Bless this lonely child, who dreams of a better tommorow!

He's tired of praying, to God all in vain
He slits open his wrists, and lets out the pain
A sick twisted smile, curls onto his face
Whats wrong with the lonely child, who cant find his place?

Every single tear he ever shed
He replaces it with blood--and so he bled
So He layed dying, in a pool of crimson hate
It was his own doing, not a matter of fate

The blood flowed freely, as his pain shows
He feels dizzy, as his breathing slows
He took his last agonizing breath, and closed his eyes
And was cleansed of the hate and the lies

He Layed Dead, Still With A Sick Smile On His Face
Finally at Peace, Bless This Lonely Child, Who Now Found His Place

that was, like, wow. Amazing. You're really talented.

thank you very much. i appreciate it, anyone else?

wow... this is awsome...

thank you very much i do try hard when it comes to things like this. anyone else? feedback is what keeps me going.

WOW; that's amazing. i think maybe you should write another one; in someone else's point of view. maybe one of his teachers?

you should have that published. im serious

I like it a lot. Powerful. The repetition was a good idea. Its very good, a few punctuation errors here and there, but that's ok.

i really like it

its one of the bst ive heard

Wow. Just wow.

That was really powerful. Like DaToNeViEtBoI916, the use of repetition gave it a lasting affect, the flow and rhyme of each stanza was perfect and smooth, and just the message and heartwrenching emotion it has is what makes it memorable. Twas` my favorite line.

Mucho love,

Alyson

your poem is wonderful, fantastic..
and......
could i ask what's the meaning of 'white lies' ^^"
i've heard many ppl mentioned it, but i'm just not sure..
a beautiful lie??

omg.. that was amazing. i love it.

wonderful. it was so powerful and emotional with the flow and choice of words...amazingly written.

omg, he killed himself ? the ending was interesting but it's overall, its sad.

wow...
i really like it..
its so sad..
u should get this published...

thats freaking good.. keep up the good work

thank you so much everyone, really i appreciate it. and by little white lies i mean like, someone would ask him why he has cuts all over or something and he would just say he tripped and got scratched. so he hides his true emotions to the world, while dying inside.

thank you everyone. any more comments?

edit: oh yeah, you guys really think this should get published?

That's awesome, you obviously have some talent. ^^

Wow all I have to say is splendid. Honestly I must say you have the gift for poetry.

I think the reason the story is so good is because that it was a true event. You have more control over it then if you're writing about something you have no idea about. I hope that makes sense in a way...

OH SH*T! -- thats really sad/depressing --- good job!