hey well i wasnt sure if i was allowed o ask for help here but im having a really hard time w/ this assignment . Well for english im supposed to be doing a monologue ....and im havign trouble putting mines together ..so far this is my whoel story :

i am a pregnant teenager who goes to the police to ell them that my boyfriend beat me up. then later on in the story ...i have a misscarriage ...

im having horrible writers block ..? ..and was wonderin if anyone could help ...or if anyone could fix the sroy so it would be easier to do ?
thanx

Hmm. I suck at writing so I can't really help you. Though I think this may of been better posted in the homework board.

I'm sure someone will help you out though

i think you have a good start...
you should put more obstacles that the main character has to go through; more conflicts to keep the story suspenseful.
just go with the flow.
good luck.

oh thanx ...i didnt kno we had a hwwork board? ..lol ..

well i was tryna lessen the obstacles becuz im gonna be doing it by myself and i have to act it so that u kno who is talking to me and what they're sayin...and i thought it was getting harder...the more i add to it becuz there will be more peopel to talk to ...thanx =)

wouldnt this belong in the homework section? but since its about pregnancy and such i guess its okay?

um.. just expand ur words and stuff.. it should work out. just write wat u think. and then revise and edit bla bla bla

ps.. the homework board is under "interests"

^ yes, this should go in the homework section.

Anywho, What are you wanting us to fix? I'd need a little more info besdies the first few sentences. Good topic on a monologue, however. I just finished mine.

-Moved to Homework section-
(Not sure to put this in homework or writing so Imma just out it in homework for not

Pretend that it is something real happening to you...and picture yourself in that situation. It should stop writer's block....

thanx every one a lot .. =)

Something how the girl struggles to get to the police station because she is tired and weak from her boyfriend beating her up, and she's limping, etc. Then she finally gets there, and faints or whatnot. You could say something like, "and all I remember after that was darkness" if she fainted. Then she wakes up and she's in the hospital, and the doctors and nurses are monitoring her, but then she finds out she's had a miscarriage, I guess because her boyfriend beat her up. If that helps any.

cliche is very bad. that's what i tell everybody even when they don't use cliches. :)

describe the setting and the people a lot.. describe the room where the miscarriage took place and talk about colors. it was cold, and the walls were painted blah. masked nurses and surgeons (or whatever they are) silently circled the room with tools, making notes and incisions. occasionally their brows would furrow in frustration or disbelief. paint the picture of the miscarriage, it shouldn't be too hard. also, note the expression of the people when they find out.

be sure to have the boyfriend's persona well thought out, so his personality carries into everything he does.

seems like an interesting assignment. i don't think i'm much of a writer, but these sort of things are fun.

Since you have writer's bock, you should stop writing about it for a while and come back to the story when you have a new idea. Writing is like that, you never know when something will come to you.