its hard
and it sucks
but you do it
for the birds
and the bees
and for me
for the faeries
for the creatures
for the demons
and the people
know you
destroy you
bleed you
caress you
and make you feel like the bestest piece of shit
its in your blood
in the veins
in the body
in the ground
underground
awake
asleep
and dreaming
of a nightmare

ok this got over looked, and i want an opinion, so im gonna bring it back to the top of the page...

lol.

as for double posting, bite me

lol, since u want a critique so bad- Wondering what inspired you to write this, it's a different style, but this line, "and make you feel like the bestest piece of shit " really throws the reader off =P

i like it!! and i like the random long line =)

i like it a lot. i like the randomness of it

I think it is good work james :) It is random, but at the same time it ties together so perfectly. Keep submitting :)

"bestest piece of shit". classic. hehe.