The sun is still shinin
i miss you even though my heart is broken
remember the door is still open
my tears are soakin cuz after my words are spoken
your eyes will be woken
and then the love will be forever...
and ever..
ill be there for you whenever wherever..

awesome? good? bad? terrible?

uhh i think its alrite...not bad...

haha better than your raps.
but yeah, it's okay.

I agree, it is better than "your" raps. But I do have to say I think there is a bit too much rhyming going on just for the sake of rhyming.

agreed. IMO, i think it's best if you stick to this.

Lol i agree too. you should stick to poems not raps. N.e ways its ok, not the best but ok.

hey doode i aint ginnah diss u but good ur poems are good ill admit it but like chrissy said too much alito rhyming like in the beggining

pretty good, honestly.
lets just hope this one wasn't a google poem, eh?

its ok,
now the problem is will it get turned into a rap?

im not being prejeduce buti dont like it

you need work, you should stick to your raps.

rap IS poetry ..


hah, that be so funny if he stole this poem from somewhere, too .. google time ! =P

hm, didn't find any matches. lol good job jason

yeah but you dont call a sonnet, free verse. there are different types of poetry. rap is shallow poetry. believe it or not. he should tread in the shallow end.
"poetry is the grandest of all the fine arts, easiest to dabble and hardest to master."

lol i agree. hahaha...

thank god it wasnt a rap

He probaly copied it from somewhere else. I don't trust Jason for nothing now that he has been exposed.

Whoa, hold the phone. Jason didn't write a rap?! he wrote a poem??! what is the world coming too???!?!?!!? lol jk jason, i thought it was pretty good, kinda turned into a rap at the end, but i admire ur persistance :) hehe

This is the first poem I actually understood...and I didn't have to re-read it...It's realli good!!!...I love the message behind it..how you still love this person and you'll always be there if she/he changes his/her mind...thats soOo good!!!..

better than your raps, but the last three lines only rhyme because you used the same word at the end of all of them.

i like it

i dont get it