the queen of hearts she baked som tarts
you threw them back in her face

the knave of hearts he stole those tarts
you helped him on his way

peter gave you pixie dust
you took it up your nose

tinkerbell danced round your head
you tore of her wings

santa climbed down the chimney
you lit a fire in the hearth

rudolph waited on the roof
you stuck his antlers on the wall

i tired to love you
you tore me down

i made you laugh
you made me weep

everyone would die for you
you would watch and laugh

and now its done

I do like the beginning... the end seems hurried, but forgive me if I am wrong.

In general, I love it. Along with most of your work, it leaves me craving for more.

I think someone's a little angry... but its good stuff so all is well.

i love the creative flow that just comes from all your work...lovely.

Liked how you lead into the different characters. Quite the imaginative bit I must say

wow...i didnt get it at the beginning..lol..i like it...

yeah it was, it was a late english assignment

Yes? Well hurried ending or not, it's still fantastico¹

¹) Is "fanstastico" even a word?!?

hey i had no idea you could write! lol, but i haven't been in the writing section for a while. That was really good! I loved how the poem just flowed, but at the same time was blunt and to the point. You've got talent, i especially liked this part...

"i tried to love you
you tore me down

i made you laugh
you made me weep"

Great job