through my mind's eye
i do spy
some gossipy girl
fingers twisting their curls
chatting away
at people's follies from today

through my mind's eye
i do spy
a group of vapid boys
playing with their toys
ruining some girl's name
like it's nothing but a game

through my mind's eye
i do spy
a student in the back
feasting on a verbal snack
she looks upon the scene
looking sad, disgusted, mean

through my mind's eye
i do spy
a girl with a pen
an open mind and then
i write what i see
making pretty poetry

SO good... i love th esecond verse

I loved that..especially that last verse. very nice.

wow...i love the pattern/style you wrote it...flows quite nicely. great job naomi!

hey!

wow i really like that... i can relate. I agree about liking the second verse the best... i bet too many girls can relate to that. >.< good job!

aNNa

Yeah, thanks. I tend to be very quiet in class. I'm the girl who's brooding in the back of the room and doodling all over her notebooks...lol. I just write what I see!

I like the whole idea of drawing out the entire scene around the narrator. And the scheme of the entire thing was put together really well. Hope you keep posting up your written work. looking forward to reading some more of your thoughts/ideas/whatever you wanna call em'.

like what stephinika said, i love the pattern
the way you put it gives it a real feeling too
great job.

I like this poem a lot. I like how you repeat the first line. Good job. =]

awsome poem

Great job, Naomi!

It flowed very well and it was very descriptive.

Keep up the good work. :D

I loved it! that part especially^ You have got talent, I really liked how you traced the poem back to yourself at the end.