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thatgirlmarcy
i wrote this a while ago when i was really pissed off. umm i guess its oaky.. i'm not good at writting LOL
anyways here it is

why does she
written by Marcy

why does she get to see you
and i get left behind in this cold world
i've waited years for someone like you
and now i might lose you

why does he get to see you
why do the roses of spring
get to see you more then i do
why am i left behind

don't i deserve one special thing between
you and i. instead i get left with my
paper cut out heart that have torn
cut out edges. the blood rushes through
my mind, i dont belong in your life anymore

No where to go, no where to hide
all i want to do is crawl up in a ball
and hide from the cold ass world
f**k everyone, f**k love, f**k the world

why does she get to see you
why do i get left behind, all
i want is to be happy, i dont want to
look in the mirror anymore, i just wanna break it
and watch my blood fall slowly onto the ground

sometimes... i hate you.



the end
KissMe2408
wow that's great. I love the concept and what you are writing about, and how you put that into words. I think you're pretty great at writing. There's a few places here that are a lil rough around the edges but it sounds good to me :)
stephinika
nicely done. i like it though its a tad cliche, but still well done. good job.
Gypsy Eyes
It's pretty good. personally I hate when people curse in poetry.
Wishful_Dream
^ i hate it when people curse in poems too.

Anyways, this poem was lovely. I really liked it. =) You are talented. =P
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