You

When my world was charcoaled black,
You gave me inspiration to get on track,
The conforting words you talked me through,
I guess I believed that they were true,
The powers you have to make me smile,
But the happiness... it's been a while,
Looking at you, seeing your soft warm eyes,
How they've changed, now all I see are lies,
The ways you've hurt me, like you don't care,
The goodness I got out of you, the things I bear,
You don't know how much I've lost,
You said you'd do anything, no matter the cost,
But now I know, my life is so low,
I've tried to be strong, tried to free myself of woe,
But for some reason I can't,
I've forgotten your faithful chant,
It's so clear now, there's nothing I can do,
All I ever needed... was you.


Okay, so it's not great... but what do you expect from a 12 year old?

i like it. easy to relate to. keep up the good work.

Ooh. Pretty good!

I like it.
Nice job. [=

wow your 12 years old...hehe nice for a 12 year old hehe. This sounds like when I was trying to commit suicide and my best friend, Justin came along and give me these advices on not to do this. Like it's not my best choice. But yeah great job!

GOOD POTENTiAL HAWMiE

That's so deep I love it

nice :]

hey! i'm twelve years old too!
it's pretty good. but i usually don't like rhyming poetry because it always sounds like the writer tries too hard to make it rhyme and gives it a sense of unnaturalness(ifthat'saword).

wow you're 12? that's awesome girl. i love it so meaningful!