Every night you’re in my mind
And as I close my eyes and begin to dream
You’re all that I can see time after time
Every moment I dream, I remember your eye’s gleam

Every morning I wake up relishing my stargaze
I wake up tired from talking to you all night long
As everyday passes by the love I saw, blazed
Every morning I wake up knowing where I belong

Every day I stare into your longing eyes
And as our lips lock into place
I feel as if I in the skies
Every day we always leave in a somber embrace…

It's got a nice theme, but the rhythym is kinda off. I like the depth and originality. The rhyming is nice, too.



I didn't quite understand that line...

It's very nice, though. I'm not trying to be mean, just giving constructive crticism.

Stargaze is a synonym for dream and that's how the rhyme is supposed to be.

well i think it's good. i like the theme of it

Well thank you smthngcrprategrl34