Murder
By: Savannah Harrison



Words written on the side of the street,
Neverending, without a beginning,
Like the shadow of yourself that never seems to weep.

There's this screaming, mind-numbing silence,
Echoing through the hall,
Calling us to something that could be considered violence.

And someone innocent just cried from the corner,
Looks like she might be dead,
And then there's a boy, who must be a mourner.

Now it must have been a murder,
And you can't deny it,
No, you can't deny it, because you were the one who heard her.

Cause she was screaming and crying,
Begging the Lord to come save her,
And she must have known, like you knew, that she was the one dying.

And who would have thought that he was the one,
Such an irony that now unfolds,
That the one who has killed her was her very own son.

His defense was that she beat him,
But who would believe it,
Because alive she was just so proper, just so prim.

He's just a boy, not yet a man,
Trapped in that jail cell,
Lost in his treachery, unable to stand.

You saw it all with your own two eyes,
Never let anyone tell you differently,
What you saw were two people, taking out their anger, living their lives.

I like the concept, but I don't know...it doesn't seem to have a consistent rythym. That's just my opinion, though.

Yeah the inconsistent rythmn makes it a little hard to follow.

good rhythm. i liked it.

ehh hmm its good but the flow is awkward

thats true. i attempted to rap it a lil and it is kinda awkard, nice rhyming though.

violence & silence.
i pronounce violence
viiiolence
so it dont rhyme fer me.

is it about the mother's child kill his own mother an the child went to jail ? i sort of get it thought.

I like that.. even with the inconsistent rhyming, I like it. :D

Nice job.

^poems arent' ment to be rapped to... lol in my opinion

but its good....

nice try

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ehh hmm its good but the flow is awkward

True, but I like the concept. It was a little hard to follow, but it's still nice! Keep it up!

He probably tried rapping it because raps have flows and doesn't usually have bumps. But anyway about the poem, It's good, does have inconsistent rhyming but good job nonetheless.

i like it. very somber. atleast that's how i inturpret it.

christmas is a hurt piece.