ok im not depressed or nething but i was really mad wen i wrote this ok:

suicide:

i cannot live
i cannot die
i cannot cease the flow of time
so i pass,
from one plane to another
its not your fault,
dear mother and father
i leave you now
with this note of despair
i feel it now
the hands of death
always and forever,cold and bare
so now i lie
at the foot of my bed,
the blood flowing freely
from
my
head

critisims is required!! i INSIST

sounds like teen angst. Lol.

Its not bad, but its not good.
Dont know what else to say..

don't commit suicide

haahaa! ok im NOT gunna commit suicide, i just liked that theme wen the words came into my mind, i just wrote w/e came and this poem is wat came. so like lol....dun get freaked, *EVERYONE I SHOW THIS TOO GETS FREAKED LOL*

It's odd...I will say that. This is what I think, From my head, should be one line. Everything else I think is fine.

its pretty good, i think

that's nice