a light shone brightly across midnight`s death
bury me deep, i cried.
looking above, a muffled cry of anguish runs chills down my spine.
pricks my neck as a shadow casts over me
circling my hope and laughter, gazing fire down upon me
i run feeling it`s eyes whisper hate into my blood..
poisoning my veins, extracting my joy.
with one quick sweep i fall helplessly.
blinded in moments.

but with you.
with the hold of you.
im indestructable

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Blegh. that sucked arse.
oh wells, first post thingy majiggy for me.

kinda lost me jambajuice but yeh that was good keep it up

Hey, welcome to the Writing forums.

I liked what you posted, not bad.

Don't be so hard on yourself. It was good.

Hope to see you more often around here.

-Joe

lol. wow, i have feedback. amazing.

and im always hard on myself, because it seems that whatever i do is never "good enough" or "acceptable" and when i try, i end up failing. so i dont bother "to try"

and im sorrie if i lost you, i was trying to say the sdhfaksalskdjf of things like "eyes whisper" and my ending was pretty bad, but yeah, its basically asking for someone to catch me when i fall.

blah, wth am i saying.

lovely poem =P Welcome to cb forums and hope you actually stay =P

That's really good. Don't be so hard on yourself.