i wrote this for my ex right now i dont give a care about any writing guidelines critisism say whatever u want i rhymed this one iight

no matter how hard i tried to get u back
i gotta give it up and get back on track
the times with you id never forget
every last moment that id never regret
only that time when everything fell
where it went in chaos and sent us through hell
just a phone call away i heard ur voice
i choked up on my words and i didnt have a choice
i was so scared i couldnt say sorry to you
out of so many chances it didnt go through
the songs u played while we were on the phone
i cried so hard and realized that im on my own
now im gonna go away and out of your sight
so it can go back to the way when everything was right
im sorry i couldnt say these simple words to you
but only to hope that youd keep your head up and make it through

im like going goodbye here yall im like so f*cked up right now

nice poem... wat happened...

i just gave up on everything man...im thinking of quittin CB too .....

u quit i will hunt you!!

right now man i dont noe what to do..ive thought of suicide and some other bad sh*t yeh quittin CB would be a good idea wont it?

if you quit imma quit

well man u dont needa quit if i quit i already came up with a goodbye message but havent posted it yet im stilll thinking

u bastard... =P

bastard lol well sam dooooode well shiet man u like i call it my first friend here and shiet man thnx i think im gonna say goodbye

your seriously leaving...
man alright then.. cya around

later

aiitez you better stay we need more writers in CB...

theres plenty of good writers here yall dont need me =/

You're so emo...

why are you going to kill yourself over a girl... let me ask you some questions:
How old are you?
Is she the same age as you?
How long were you together?
Was it some stupid teenage puppy love?

Your poem wasn't bad and it actually made sense... I actually think if you weren't busy thinking about rhyming then maybe you could have expressed yourself even BETTER! you should try it some time... just let the words come out don't think about what you said previously.... As for the rhyming thing.... if you're going to rhyme then go into rapping or hip hop.

And for the 'oh i'm leaving cB thing...' I have something to say to that:
why?
why leave just because some stupid girl left you and because you're depressed?
i don't think you have a clue of how it is to be depressed...
you're probably not going to commit suicide because you would've done it by now.
if you DO leave... DO NOT.... DO NOT.... DO NOT! make one of those stupid 'goodbye cb' sh*ts in the lounge... GOD ANYTHING BUT THAT.... but if you feel as if you need to say something then... write a poem and ehh underneath be like "okay i'm leaving cb now kthxbye"

ahhh u made mel mad... just stay mike girls are sometime u shoulnd't over exaggerate about =P

eh, cheer up fellow poetry writer. Girls arent everything, besides theres alot of them out there, waiting for you.

i guess your right mel im some stupid emo guy with too much feelings and i aint leaving over a girl i aint depressed cuz of that and well yeah i use too many rhymes ight srry im like that and to say i dont have a clue about being depressed well u may be older than me but as a youngster i know how depressed feels im srry if what im saying pisses u off but just because your older that doesnt mean anything ive been through alot of sh*t and right now im going through a tough time so w/e then ill make it plain and simple iight im leaving cB ok thats it

I wasn't that serious about the no clue depression thing... age has nothing to do with depression...
I was depressed when I was 11 until I was... well until the present day...

im sorry im just being an ass right now i dont mean it srrrrry mel its just i just needa go away for while im not leaving just gotta go away yenno be by myself for awhile

okay, have fun...

and i still think you're an ass :x hehe

hehe i know well yall take care iight ill miss yall XD

Wow!! Some genius yah got here... impressive man. tc.

you didn't even say bye to me you are an ass!!!

mel we can hate him together =P lolz come back soon!

aww so sweet, really nice poem so talented. for a talented guy like u, i hope u get back 2gether

You're just blinded right now, Mike.

All your emotions are just clouding you judgment. Give yourself time, and think things through when you're more calm and level-headed.

well mel said dont give any umm goodbyes but yeh anywayz ill see yall in awhile and sam i said bye to u already u fart but since u blind ima say bye again and joe see ya lter and mel......XD see u later too ight peace

he didn't even say how long he's going to be gone... and he hasn't even been at cB for a month... hmph

I'll tell you this. The most biggest mistake to make is NOT to make-up. I seriously know how to feel since I personally went to break-ups. I hope that everything goes right, and don't worry, it'll gonna be alright.

Just keep your head up, and don't give up.

Best of luck (:

-Hope that I could've said more,but I really can't say anything right now..

i noe not even a month but yeah ill be a member for more than a month missing out on some stuff so yeah ill be gone for a uhh umm 2 weeks iight peace out yall

It's a good poem. But calm down a bit ... it's only a girl. You may be all depressed and feelin f*cked up right now ... but soon you're gonna find some other girl even better .. dont wurry .. you're still young ..

She has a point...don't go stressin' over a girl man. Oh yeah, Your poem is really good!! =]