there comes a point in life where everyone dies
no matter how much u try, you'll eventually cry
seeing a loved one die in your arms
this pain you cannot bear, you'll protect it from harm
now that your alone and you close the door
you feel helpless as you fall to the floor
missing your loved one is the right thing to do
but it gets to the point where it breaks you in two
when no more can u control whats in yur mind
your helpless,lost with nothing to find

hrmmm need masta to proofread this or anyone can proofread it if u see any mistakes kkz iight ill come back wayyy later on peace

wahh we must stop with rhymes... its your mind not yur ... hahaha anyways i found it good =P

i cant help it lol ive been rhyming and rhyming kinda got a habit of it but still tryin to change

same here... imma try my best not to rhyme only rhyme on certain times =P i promise ill come home from school with poems!!

the rhyming is very obvious...just make the poem flow....

okkk mzzzz aznbus lets see if i can do that