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Heathasm
The napkin was steamed to where it looked like a moist cloud, towering over the modern soup cup; it was so mellow-dramatic, and pretty--I regret just throwing it away--I could have sat in another room watching it harden-returning to a more calloused version of what it used to be, just as young girl’s hearts do, after they have fallen in and out of love (When romantic things like lying naked in the bathtub together just don’t seem to fill her heart any more); or taken a picture to keep in mind the effect-how full the napkin looked and felt-not having to see the warm soup’s perspiration slowly evaporate-trickling down it’s sides, as if it were bleeding all over the cup, and dramatically spilling onto the counter top

theres no certain style to this i just wrote exactly what was flowing through my mind
rainnydaiis
wow nicely done... it seems like theres a certain meaning behind it but i can't figure it out... good job =P love the uniquness
Heathasm
QUOTE(rainnydaiis @ Sep 24 2004, 9:03 AM)
wow nicely done... it seems like theres a certain meaning behind it but i can't figure it out... good job =P love the uniquness

eh its basically about how after each relationship i go through my heart just a little more colder and dried up than it used to be

thanks :) i appreciate the commentt!
melface
QUOTE(Heathasm @ Sep 24 2004, 3:31 AM)

theres no certain style to this i just wrote exactly what was flowing through my mind

i do that ALL the time... So I know exactly how that is... but it sucks when i get carried away and it makes no sense at all..Heh..

I like it! =]
TheSilenceInDiction
Finally! I haven't seen great work in a while.

Very well done - The imagery and metaphors make your piece more of a delight. The tone also suits well.

Keep it up, Hope to see more of your writing.
Heathasm
QUOTE(MasteRxKiD @ Sep 24 2004, 2:41 PM)
Finally! I haven't seen great work in a while.

Very well done - The imagery and metaphors make your piece more of a delight. The tone also suits well.

Keep it up, Hope to see more of your writing.

cool, glad you think, i have alot to wite so i wll post more
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Heathasm
QUOTE(xSonia @ Sep 26 2004, 1:15 AM)
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