verse I wrote to this girl a while back..

I can't explain all of my actions, the yelling and the rudeness -
The truth is, I think the pain from Cupid's arrow made me do this -
When I was hurt, I swore your words' uses was endless -
You were my doctor, minus the suit n syringes -
I can't let go, and I know that the pain is worth you -
Hate when I don't have you, and despise this patience virtue -
When my words hurt you, girl, the pain inside's shifty -
I step out in the rain, and let the angels cry with me -
You're all I need, so your departure would bring death to me -
You're ecstasy, I'd choose you over a breath to breathe -
So step with me, take my hand, my words aren't untrue -
You give me life like the sun do, you're the one, boo, I LOVE YOU -

omg... ur such a sweet guy

Haha.. Thank you =)

You're very talented and sweet. Very refreshing stuff.

*acts like a groupie*

awww jake, u so freakin sweet omg omg im ur bigest fan omg ur so damn cool! lol

lmao just messin, nice lol

gimme gimme gimme that groupie love..

haha, naw.. =P

Thanks, people..

very nice. lucky girl.

ha, could be a rap...that would be tight lol. BUt it is real sweet..sounds good

thanks for the replies.. and ^^ yeah.. it IS a rap.. but rap verses are poetry also.. or at least can be

wow that is serious skill
i am big fan of rapping
that is so CRAZY GOOD rap verse right thurr
and yea rap IS poetry

in one of my posts, u said to hit da song for u..what do u mean by that? i'm kinda brainless and nice writing u got there.

i didnt even realize it was a rap, but you're right rap is poetry and that was a great poem. nice work!