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Missing_You
A New Dawn

I'm in the murky water, where nothing is that clear.
I hear his voice and can tell he is somewhere extremely near.
I push off the bottom floor and soar up to the top.
I take a look around--but stop!
Over yonder, by the shore stands a man dressed in white.
He calls again and now I know, tis his voice the is delight.
Swimming toward my freedom I stop and take a look.
At the place I was I was before, where I always was a crook.
I shudder off the memories.
My Past, My thoughts are gone.
For now those are behind me
And I am ready for a new dawn.

So what do you think???

.::BSM::.
Missing_You
anybody out there??
HuGs_fOr_yOu
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Fashionista225
I like it! It just kinda seems like you tried really hard to make it rhyme.
Ze world is a Mask
QUOTE(Fashionista225 @ Jul 26 2004, 3:45 PM)
I like it! It just kinda seems like you tried really hard to make it rhyme.

ya i used to think that poems HAS TO RHYME but it ended up bad
but your poem has meaning
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