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you've got a disquieting voice here. you're a great writer and that's a good quality.. i like your beginning rhythm, the abcab format. it changes in the second and third stanzas so it threw me off some. But the second stanza picks up nicely all the same, depressing, but nice.
When I read the third stanza I was expecting it to make sense, but it deteriorated to a raw bluntness that I personally disagree with. It feels like you wanted to finish it in a hurry, and you didn't care how you said what you wanted to say; you just said it.

Good work; I just don't agree with it's point.

Basically, you nailed it. Also, the rhyme scheme in the first stanza was unintentional--I didn't notice it.

But even in its messiness, I like this. This was written with someone in mind, and the structure mirrors what we went through.

I greatly appreciate the response.

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