please critique it...thanks, your thoughts will be greatly appreciated.


I’m sorry for everything

I wonder day by day,
As to why I feel this way

Contemplating my own actions,
Reverting to past fractions,

I ask myself,
Why people do the things they do?
And say the things they say?

I’m sorry for everything,
Everything I put you and your heart through
I’m sorry for breaking your promises
I’m sorry for not trying hard enough,
I’m sorry for not understanding you,
I’m sorry for everything


I cannot express my love,
You are the sun on my dark gloomy days
I love you, I need you, you are my everything
I'd do anything to make you happy if you just trust me.

So by the ugh you wrote, I'm guessing you don't like it? It's short and sweet. Your rhyming scheme is pretty cool too. It's good.

i like it!
good job

no, I like it but, the poem describes my current situation with my girlfriend.

Thanks, I really appreciate the responses

I like it.