i had to write a poem regarding diversity in my school, so i just wanted feedback. feel free to criticize to make it better :)
thanks

One Breath
Assimilation they say
Is the answer to discrimination,
discrimination-
the reason why
I can’t walk without
Thinking,
thinking-
My skin, my age, my gender
What are they thinking?

Sea of faces
Fast walking
Speed talking
Oh, slow down
Down
Goes the walls
That are oh so brittle
scatter the world
with bags of skittles
taste the rainbow and
allow the flow of
different people

Best kept secret:
There’s beauty everywhere.
So lend me your pair of shoes
and I’ll walk your mile
breathe your style
Then maybe it’ll really be
One nation under God,
Indivisible
While individuals can still
spread their own chronicles

Intertwined,
in my mind is the
hearts of all our people
so learn to love him, who is
not the same as her
and her, who does not believe
in your trusted Word
then maybe
acceptance in
diversity and
your own personality
can breathe,
finally.

This is probably late, but I really enjoyed it. I like the skittles part.